I lie at least twice a day.
the first one for tricking myself into believing you’ll stay forever,
and the second for believing in the colors of your eyes
that change more often than seasons and fall faster
than a meteor intent on breaking apart my planet.
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prompt: encased in denial
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best PW from november contest:
ap name: mesmerized--x
Amaranthine Lover
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"than a meteor intent on breaking apart my planet."
like that last line, very intense -
I love it! Short but very powerful, that first line brings the reader's interest instantly, and your description of the second lie is amazing in its imagery.
Well penned,
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Wow.
This is truly wonderful.
And I can relate to it very much.
You say, "sorry" in your ANs too much though...
Shelly
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thanks
ya i do.. if you read my poem called sorry, im pretty sure i say sorry a lot in that one as well.. especially at the end
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interesting take on tricks and lies. this poem is emotion-filled and beautifully metaphorical!
thanks for entering! -
One tells themselves many things to ease the pain. Often believing their own lies. Thanks for entering into the contest.
Be well and be blessed,
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believing in the colors of your eyes
that change more often than seasons and fall faster
than a meteor intent on breaking apart my planet.
oh wow.
that's fucking incredible.
ahhh I love this.
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this was a sad attempt at a poem that didnt really work out.. i couldnt think of anything to add on, but i do like it short as well.
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It's short, but I like it. Good opening line. It feels like there should be more. I'm really liking the metaphor in line four.
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