I am but one and yet have another,
I am not a twin do not have a brother,
this figure is dark, and always at my side,
when I try to run from life it knows where I hide.
Through the good times even though there were not a lot,
and the bad times I rather time had forgot,
you have walked the life with me that I have chosen,
felt the ice of rejection upon us as one we were frozen.
You witnessed me at my worst when I was angry at Sky,
you shared the moment after where, alone I sit and cry.
you took the drugs with me when I wanted to die,
you had the awakening with me when I asked myself why?
We went through hell together a father who never gave a shit,
all the beatings I took you felt every last hit,
when I would run away saying this was not for me any more,
you were there when I went back knocking on my front door.
You have watched me grow into the man I am now,
every tear I shed, every drop of sweat from my brow,
I became a fighter I refused to give,
we began our life again a better life to live.
My life is a gift now,
all I had to do was untie the bow,
but that should be easy I have my partner,
my shadow.
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Just Bored Hope You Enjoy
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Very nice
A very smooth write. You bring your shadow to life with your words.
Thank you for sharing.
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Great write! Good luck!
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Coolio, James! Well done! Good flow and great take on your shadow being there with you always, watching, following, standing by, but also being a companion and friend. Interesting and a nice read.
This reminds me of my favorite poem of yours, the teddy bear one, and I just went to read it because this reminded me of it and I can't find it! Do you still have it on AP?
Your Sister from Another AP Mother
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The shadow
Or perhaps your soul bearing the inner pain with you. But a story that in the end brings on a brighter day. And one that many can relate to. well done young poet.
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I really like this piece. I first thought maybe you were going to take a darker approach... like the thing that WONT leave you alone.. I was glad it was more kind in it's tribute. Superior writing. "I am but one and yet have another,
I am not a twin do not have a brother,"
was amazing rhyme and flow.
I agree... it should be published somewhere.
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What a masterpiece! This belongs published somewhere Jamie!
You spoke from within, and you gave life to your shadow, a task that is not easy at all to do but you have done so flawlessly!
One of your best writes hunni
♥
Stay safe
Love to You
~Manda
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This is a superbly good piece of writing emotive and strong great rhyme, nice strong easy read rhythm, thanks for sharing littlefishone
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this is excellent writting, how vry true our shadows see all, well done
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Wow!
I think that's all I really can say. You really put a good perspective on ourselves. I never would have thought of ourselves as a witness and guide, friend, etc, but you really made an excellent point through this poem. I have no suggestions for revisions.
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Wow, this was a great poem about your shadow. It shows so much within it. I love how the shadow is kinda left a mystery till the end. Excellent write!!!
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I really enjoyed this piece. It flowed so smoothly and effortlessly. I must say this was a great write and an even better read. I love how you speak on the true nature of ourselves and how we are never alone in the darkness. Great write and I look forward to reading more from you!
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i love this..to think we have been a witness to ourselves all along...great write!
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Wow, this is so well done. I don't normally like poems with rhyme, but this flows perfectly and none of the words feel forced. It's also interesting to hear talk of such painful occurences and a poem form that is usually used for more lighthearted writing. I really loved this. This stanza was great, although I liked them all:
"You witnessed me at my worst when I was angry at Sky,
you shared the moment after where, alone I sit and cry.
you took the drugs with me when I wanted to die,
you had the awakening with me when I asked myself why?"
Great write -
For just being bored, this is pretty good! Thanks for sharing.
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Nice writing
love love love
true story telling within a poem -
Wow! If this is what you write when you're bored lets hope you stay bored more often!
rhyming was great and it was easy to understand! To me your shadow is really yourself...the one person who is always there with you through everything.
"My life is a gift now, all I had to do was untie the bow"
This line is brilliant!!!
keep writing
darlintl
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Very nicely written
i love the rhym and the flow the poem has.
a great stroy told.
x
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Very well done brother dearest......
I agree with you this is indeed an brilliant write...you flow with ease and rhyme while i feel the words form and spring from my lips....James you grow with each poem I read 
all I can say if this is just bored brother cant wait to see what you pen when you are getting down to business.... Definitely one of your best looking forward to the next time you are feeling bored
damn proud.
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Excellent. Wonderful rhyme and flow. Love every line... Keep writing.
~lae
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Hi Son
This has to be one of your very best pieces.A well told story of part of your life(hopefully a part left well behind now)
The rhyme is well done as is the flow
All in all a poem you can be proud of
Excellent
Dad
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