Broken, mangled, ripped into a hundred pieces
I try to stitch my heart back together
But keep slipping on the blood loss.
Fragments sliding through my hands,
Falling to the floor.
Your words were the explosion
That sprayed shrapnel into my head.
I can feel the heat of the syllables
As they roll off your tongue,
Searing into my skull, severing the neurons
of what I thought was love.
The silence in the wake of the concussion
Amplifies the damage done,
Leaves me alone to mend
What's left of a life without you.
Author notes
Author Name: Stitched-Heart
This poem is about what it felt like to have "We're over and I want a divorce" uttered into my ear from the phone.
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This was heartwrenching as well as dark- like a blackened love that was maimed and buried 6ft below. I loved the flow of words and twisted imagery. stunning masterpiece. -T
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thanks for the entrie, The back ground makes it hard to read but other then tht its extremly gd
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I hope that helps. Backgrounds and me don't really work well together. thank you for the comment.
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WOW
Cut more than a knife...powerful and equisite write, captured all the emotion of such brokeness.
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thank you very much
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Divorce does really suck... my husband recently requested a divorce from me so I hear ya
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heartbreaking.and so true.well done
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You have done a wonderful job composing this piece. The emotion is very strong. Sometimes it can be next to impossible to put our pain to paper but you managed it. Thanks so much for sharing.
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thank you for taking the time to comment on this piece
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Oh Wow
This is so sad. But you wrote this excellently with deep emotions as well as imagery. It flowed very well too. I thank you for sharing your gift to write poetry with me and thank you for commenting on one of my poems too.
Wishing You Many Blessings
Much Love
Kelle Marie
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thank you!
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