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Your nothing like the others

There exists something charming
Beyond that boasting posture
And feminine framework
That allures almost my entirety,
Something special that
Seduces my very soul
Leading me into the Odyssey
Of Desire that is your gaze.
Days pass in a daze-
You’re nothing like the others…

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  • gothchyld
    December 16, 2008

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    I love the first person narration, it makes abstract emotions so abstract, and you paint a beautiful picture of desire in your vivid adjectives. Thank you for your critique, it was definitely very inspiring!