The little girl took up her little bear friend
And faced to the dark graying skies
There at the window she confided in him
While the tears trickled down from her eyes
Little bear I am so lonely
She cried as she gazed far away
I long for those arms that may hold me
And cradle me softly each day
It’s been a long wait and I’m thinking
That, that day may well never be
But still I keep hoping and praying
There’s someone there waiting for me
A little bear sits at the window alone
The long years have passed slowly by
He sits there and thinks of his little girl friend
And a tear trickles out of his eye
He remembers the arms that had held him
He remembers the things that she said
He remembers the day that she wandered away
And never came calling again
Author notes
This poem is a dedication to a little girl i grew up with in a childrens home. Not long after her leaving, she committed suicide. She was a beautiful little girl who just couldn't make it on her own. I never forgot her. I also drew the picture of the Koala.
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Excellent
as I read this I found tears hitting the keys on my laptop. Raw emotion of long ago very apparent in this moment. HUGS XXXX. Love the pic sweetie
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Thank you for your wonderful comments. I hope to be up and running full on very soon. For now, JJ has let me use his computer tonight. (He has gone to bingo).
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An excellent piece of work heartfelt and real. In my years of travel I've met many such people, none that committed suicide that I know of but sad nonetheless and lives filled with uncertainty. I'm better, as I sure you are, for the experience. Happy trails.
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Thank you so much for your lovely comments which i appreciate so much. Yes. I certainly am a better person for what i went through, and i think more understanding than if i hadn't been through what i did. Thank you so much.
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A very toughing story you weaved . Your so good at them. It is a sad one ,but well presented..
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Such a heartwrenching write. Events such as this are permanently etched in our minds and on our souls. Thank you for sharing this dedication.
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Awww! This is so sad and so sweet! I really liked it and I almost cried as I read it! Another fantastic write! Keep up the good work
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Thank you so much for your lovely comments. This though not the best of my writes means a lot to me for the reasons given.
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Very Good
Poor little bear, left all alone by the poor lonely girl. Did the girl find someone to hold her in their arms? The poem doesn't say.
I like the irony of this poem. The flow seemed a little rough, but perhaps if I read through it a few more times, it would read better to me.
I felt sorry for both the girl and bear. I hope the girl found someone and the bear gets a new owner
Andy
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Thanks for reading, Andy. This poem was written many years ago so was probably a little rough. No, the girl didn't find someone. She grew up in a childrens home with me. A few months after her leaving the home, she committed suicide. She was a beautiful girl. It was very sad.
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That's sad.
You might include something about her in your author's notes. This poem then is a true story.
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The last two lines are my favorite--I find myself saying that about a lot of poems, but I guess that is how it should be. It leaves you with a good flavor. This is a tender story. It reminds me of the children's book "The Velveteen Rabbit."
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Thank you, mate. This was written so many years ago. It was actually about a little girl i grew up with in the childrens home. She committed suicide not long after leaving. A georgous girl she was.
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So touching!
A child's tale with adult ramifications! I love how the bear takes on human qualities & ends the poem. The only thing I might do to make this poem pop is to add punctuation & to left align to emphasize the rhyme. The flow, content, word choice & rhyme are wonderful. This is an enjoyable write!
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A very beautiful write. I enjoyed this and will look forward to reading it again if you change it. Very well done. Take care and Have fun. Steve
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I just wanted to say thank you so much once again for reading my pieces. I am truly appreciative.
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Wow! This is so touching and brought tears to my eyes. The picture is just wonderful, and I have aways loved koala bears. That is great that you drew that and it fits perfectly with this poem. Very sweet, but also very sad. Blessings, Patty
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Awesome
Superb write...I like it that you almost always make animals the "stars" of your poems...This is truly a well-crafted write, good flow, good moving story to complement it. Deserving,
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I think that this was written perfectly and in a way that everyone can relate to; all people had a teddy bear when they were little or some other toy that they took everywhere.
I love how you wrote this because it could be both about suicide or growing up. You worded everything beautifully and turned your words into a sharp arrow that went straight into the heart.
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aww this touched me on a personal level...The rhythm was great too! This is a superb write!
becca
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Thank you, mate. I also drew the picture for this. Saw something like this years ago in a book.
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Oh this is so beautiful and all sad at once, just an enjoyable read, the flow and meter was so well. Best to you
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I wonder how many of us have gone away and left a once favourite 'bear' behind. Flow, rhythm and rhyme pretty good, in fact an excellent write. I have a problem with the background as its hard to see where the milky way bit is shining.
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Thanks, Bob. I had a problem getting rid of that background. Now i think it is readable. Did you see that picture? I drew that years ago.
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