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i need you more than ever

 

Broken hearts and lullabies of another kind,

tears like a river - both yours and mine.

Please take a moment to notice the state

of emotional distress I'm in.

 

~ Is anybody out there

      am I on my own? ~

 

Craving you like the Housewife Addiction,

but hating me while I lay awake and lie to myself.

Is there anything I can do to change?

Does everything have to really stay the same?

 

If I could only break free,

escape.

To find another place,

far away from here.

Like she said, I'm hers and I can join her.

But I am so afraid,

am I truly this inadequate?

 

~ I'm screaming for you

     until my lungs collapse ~

 

Are you the one who they say can hear me?

I'm not so sure anymore.

Why did you let this happen? How come I am so cold?

Hey you, if what I hear about you is true

and you can hear me when I call...

 

"Help"

 

Author notes

"the Housewife Addiction" is a reference to Valium
when it first came about and the drug was first starting to be misused, the ones who fell mostly into that category were housewives, so it became known was the "Housewife Addiction"

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  • ladybug.
    June 23
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    Gorgeous. There's a certain distress behind your every word & it breathes life into the poem.

  • This poem left me breathless..

  • Spotlight ~

    I never knew that about Valium, though it makes sense

    I like how there is a soft hint of rhyming within this in some places; the raw and honest emotions lock me into the poem as your font changes heightening the expression
    Excellent!


    Stay safe
    ~Manda

  • This is a very cliche type of poem... But I like how you made it your own, made it original. I like your word choice in it, and the imagery you created was brilliant. Great write and good luck in the contest.

    Josh

  • 9

    Wowww. Incredible. I'm in awe. I love how you wrote this so brilliantly and your words just burst from the computer screen. Incredible. (: Thanks for entering & welcome to the finalists.♥


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    November 22, 2008
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    With such sorrow

    I felt every bit of your pain you penned!
    great work!

    Blessings

    Rend


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    November 20, 2008

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    wow great write hun
    thanks so much for sharing within the group

    Tasha


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    November 15, 2008

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    so beautiful... but so heartbreaking, it's like the anthem of my heart at the moment. Frozen and raw.


  • JadedSparrow
    November 14, 2008

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    I absolutely loved this poem. I have called many times, and am calling still for the one that "loves" me to help. It would seem, much to my dismay that these cries fall on deaf ears. Superb write. It reminded me that my suffering is still very much a reality.

    Jadedsparrow


  • stylization
    November 13, 2008
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    Very good. I love the imagery. Stunning piece.

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