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October Sun

Late afternoon sun on the deck,

such a lovely day, no wind, oak

leaves falling, low angle sun 

drenched in yellow, orange and

shades of autumn haunt these

pristine days of nothing to do.

October sun near setting, 

alive with passion for those

who want warmth and will

not wait for evening to bed.

deer, bobcats, quail prowling

about, perhaps hunting.

Winter soon with us, squirrels 

scurry to and fro, finding acorns,

alarming friends of people or 

predators too near. The deck 

awash in waves of warm light,

the crashing surf of sleepiness. 

Late afternoon sun on the deck, 

a nap the perfect ending of day’s

chores and cares. the sun setting

with heat and definite abidance

to life’s plan. Like the silent animals

in our yard, age creeps upon us.


Author notes

This poem is about the change of seasons from summer to fall and anticipating winter! I think this entry is one of my best, it was inspired last week, when my wife and I were sunning on our back deck!

Option #5 -- anything goes! 

The photo shows an Autumn scene looking down a winding road, just life has its twists and turns!

 

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  • Dixie Dawn gold member
    June 16

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    October is my favorite month, and fall my favorite time of year. I could see it again, while here reading, and it was a lovely trip. This, is a new favorite of mine, for I truly loved it, THANK YOU


  • the Hunt
    May 23

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    Fantastic

    I loved this poem. It flowed nicely and brought me to the deck with you. A very aesthetically pleasing poem. I am envious.


  • motel silver member
    January 4

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    a very gentle, inviting piece ... like fall, inviting us to unwind and retreat into inevitable winter.
    thanks.


  • joebliss
    January 3
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    Makes me feel like meditating LOL. It has a calming effect for me. Great write


  • HaydenMessenger silver member
    December 17, 2008

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    The gradual turning of the seasons, as summer slowly subsides and prepares for the transition into cold, dark winter, never fails to both inspire and humble me. Autumn is, to me, the most beautiful time of year and I think there's a very real depth of human psychology behind the connection we feel to this cycle. This poem took me back to those autumn days, and I greatly enjoyed reading your personal experience of those times; I particularly liked the way you linked the movement of the seasons with the flow of time itself and its effect on us mere mortals. Your less mournful take on the fading of the sun reflected, in my eyes, a distinctly dignified acceptance - a humility I find most admirable. Thanks for sharing.


  • roninwort
    December 14, 2008
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    Very nice imagery. A very calming read. Beautiful poem!

    Ronin


  • rbruce gold member
    December 3, 2008

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    Autumn, a time for preparations and planning, or just to sit and ponder at the wonders of nature. We do the same things in spring, just as rewarding. lovely poem, giving a tranquil feel to the reader.


  • Ignored
    November 29, 2008

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    Thanks for entering!

    Good work on this poem. I love the picture that it paints in my head. Thanks for entering and Best of Luck to you.


  • wohadreambig
    November 26, 2008
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    Very beautiful write! Lots of wonderful imagry. Keep up the good writing!
    Janine


  • Jaffa-
    November 26, 2008

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    You can really see he pictures that you create. It's a really lovely poem. Great flow and very nice language. Well done and good luck in all the contests.


  • TheRemnant
    November 24, 2008

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    Brilliant, really brilliant. Sesonal poetry is some of my favourite and you have written a very inspiring piece here. I especially love the strong imagery!


  • ladyhelenaofsorrows
    November 23, 2008

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    excellent write!
    the imagery is great, and really peaceful. the picture adds to it as well, and the background color. wonderfully done!!!!


  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    November 18, 2008

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    I enjoy reading seasonal poetry especially when it relates to life.you did a good job with this.
    Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest.
    ED.


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    November 13, 2008

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    what a lovely picture, through your words, and moreso in the form of the seasons, thank you for this entry, good luck in my contest
    Linda..


  • everyone1 gold member
    November 12, 2008

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    Interesting!

    I felt very serene reading this. I am fond of those afternoons myself and you capture them well for me.

    I have nothing else to say!

    Great job ...


  • Tru Knowledge 1
    November 10, 2008
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    excellent

    thoughtful .it encourages us about life


  • Forgotten Anomaly
    November 9, 2008
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    I wish our Octobers were more like that... here there are several inches of snow and I'm strongly considering flipping the space heater back on. You paint such a beataful image that I wish I could see it... Very well penned, descriptive... That must have been a wonderful bit of insperation you had there. Thank you for entering my contest.


  • Panicked-Puppet-xXx
    November 9, 2008

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    Fantastic Jpb...

    This is nicely penned, with a brilliant vocabulary, and it is ridden with amazing imagery. It paints a beautiful picture in the minds of all those who read it. Beautiful job, please keep writing and sharing it with us all...


  • trekkergirl
    November 9, 2008

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    This is a very well written poem with a lot of wonderful imagery in it. Thanks for sharing it with us.

  • Rudy Ignatius
    November 9, 2008

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    Personally, as an avid reader of Frost, I lend the same amount of admiration here as I do to him. The natural essence of "October Sun" is as crisp and bright as the autumnal sun itself. The blazing imagery, the easy, concise diction, topped with the overall provocative metaphor makes this poem a mastery of skills only a practiced poet can produce, in my honest opinion. Stanza 2 is preferential to me, as I can read it by itself and feel that it could stand alone as a short, beautiful piece of poetry. Really, each one is a smaller poem in and of itself. While gazing at the brilliant, fiery display of leaves against the blue sky, it only seems as if these are "pristine days of nothing to do." There is much to drink in and behold in sight.

    Truly a wonderful ode to a simple autumn day.

    Smiling


  • Room without doors gold member
    November 8, 2008

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    Outstanding

    There was a lot to like here. The poem is well-structured with a definite pattern which gave me the impression that you knew where you were going. It is full of vivid detail and the imagery was excellent throughout- especially in the first stanza.
    I really liked the metaphor:
    the crashing surf of sleepiness.
    I thought this was very effective. Over all a poem that looks at the passage of time and celebrates life. A well-written and thoughtful poem. Best of luck in the contest.


  • YOtta
    November 8, 2008

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    What a description!
    Your poem is radiating so much texture, warmth and a vivid painting of nature… so beautiful!
    Makes you appreciate Gods given wonders, the simplest forms like squirrels and a late afternoon on the deck!

    You captured a picture and gave it so much life, my mind is swirling with thoughts as I read each line and move on to the next,

    Well penned, I enjoyed this piece. =)


  • maybe-misery
    November 7, 2008
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    This makes me smile =D


  • Internal Struggle
    November 7, 2008
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    i liked it, the way you used your words to vividly paint a picture..and i like the form of your words that made me feel the turning of the roads..within it..

    " the sun setting
    with heat and definite abidance
    to life’s plan. like the silent animals
    in our yard, age creeps upon us"

    i loved it "age creeps upon us" thats beautiful..
    good luck


  • cloe009
    November 7, 2008

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    yes it really is, by the way great poem. just think it soon will be turning to winter my favorite season only cause of my b-day

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