Through these veins does a boiling blood flow
Pumped through a heart that loves and a mind that knows
From the eyes, the world do I perceive
A landscape of wonders and an endless sea
Blurred by time slipping away from me
The cacophony of sounds that once filled this space
Now fading into oblivion and an awkward pace
Twilight seeping through the cracks onto the castles great hall
Battered down by trebuchet and the rams head at the walls
With the gift of harmony’s flow did come a curse
One that neither withers nor does it grow
Like waters of a river that wear the edges of stone
Ceaseless and unrelenting in its endeavor to hone
With a wizards vision of astral sight
There came a penance there came a price
Never to forget and always to behold
The tiniest of nuance forever will it glow
Every feeling, thought and pain of this journey
Remains heaped unto the next
Like the trouble of an unwanted guest
What gives the appearance of wisdom from across the fence
Is merely a pun from deep in the toy maker’s chest
To fall on to the floor to end up on ones knees
To beg the marionette to free you from his strings
If you wish me to perform at your behest
I will do it gladly if you just let me forget
Lisa Lynn ‘08
Author notes
Toy Makers Jest by Donchaquestionme aka Lisa Lynn
This particular poem is very personal to me. It harnesses my feelings on what it is that 'I' endure being a poet. The constant battle of words, melodies and images- they are constantly in my mind, there is no escape, brutality and passion feed off of the other.
Though I love to write, I do wish at times I can turn off the battle of the words inside of me- just so my mind can sleep. Now you know the meaning of this poem.
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What did you think
Comments
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This was a very powerful piece you have here. Full of strong emotions and feelings. I enjoyed readng this. Thanks for entering and bst of luck to you in the contest.
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Thank you very much Sheila.......glad to hear you enjoyed the scribe......
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Wow
I love it. I am at a loss for words. You have really penned what a lot of other writers go through. I know all to well what you mean about letting your brain rest.
I do it too. lol
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Ha ha! The brain seems to never sleep eh? I'm glad I'm not the only one when it comes to this......could be a gift, could be a curse.........
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I hope that you never try to shut off your muse, it is a gift to be able to write with as much charm as you do. Your poem has wonderful imagry and shows real heartfelt emotion. It is beautifully done.
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Thank you for your kind words Karen. When I had wrote this my mind seemed to be going nuts on me...........letters and images floating in my head (happens alot actually....call me crazy). It's just hard to complete other necessary task while holding a pen and paper and scribing, can't seem to get a thing done when that happens.
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Don't even think of shutting it off, your muse is specific to you, there will come a time when it silences itself, but while you have the flow of words such as these, just write, whether you post or not, I keep a scrapbook or notepad nearby and jot things down. You are lucky to have a prolific muse
C
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Thank you for your comment. I heed your advice too. I don't think I can shut my muse off anyways, none of us can- we are Poets........
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I appreciate your AN for this poem.
Great imagery & emotion.
An amazing write, I enjoyed reading this piece.
Very well done
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Thank you Jesaan, your comment is much appreciated....
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Wow.. this was full of vivid descriptions
and original concepts. Good flow & rhyme scheme as well.
Best of luck & thanks for entering
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Thank you very much Perfectsunset....
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This is an exquisite piece, being able to know what you were thinking when you wrote this really adds more depth to it for me. Once I realized the true meaning of it I could really relate to what you were saying. Thank you for entering the contest and best of luck.
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Thank you very much Pretty Disaster. I am pleased to hear you enjoyed my scribe.
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This is such a beautiful write, and you have used some amazing imagery here as well. Very nicely written, and thanks so much for entering. Blessings, Patty
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Thank you very much for your kind comment Paw-writer....it's much appreciated.
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Your words paint some wonderful imagery. A very neat read indeed. Thanks for entering and good luck
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Thank you very much..
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You have a way with words indeed ... a very enjoyable read ... There is a tad bit of melancholy that strikes a chord within my soul as I read each line ... great direction with the emotion as it built on more and more, sending the reader step further within the stygian abyss that coalesces with the poem so marvelous. Wonderful job.
G.
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Thank you so very much....Truly.
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Beautiful write, thoroughly deserving of the complimenting silverware..
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Thank you very much Poppa, sorry for the delay in the response (just been a tad bit busy).
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Wow
Thank you for entering this beautifully expressed, awesome write...Love it
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Thank you so very much. I'm truly glad you enjoyed the scribe.....
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this was a very nice poem flowwed very well and was very soothing good luck to you in the show down with the other contestants
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Thank you very much Jazz--i'm enjoying the contest AP and it's users are offering.
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A great write here that I enjoyed reading! Thanks for your entry and good luck
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Thank you so very much............
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Wow, this totally wasn't what I was expecting from the title; I thought it would be quite light hearted, and funny to read, but wow, this was far far deeper than I imagined! Very well written however, it was easy to read [no rambling, or ill-written wordings] ; I do have one or two small corrections but nothing serious.
"From the eyes, the world do I perceive
A landscape of wonders and an endless sea" <-- I believe you might have wished to say, the world 'I do' as opposed to 'do I' - as 'do I' sounsd like a question in the making, which, for me, doesn't fit into this setting?
"With the gift of harmony’s flow did come a curse
One that neither withers nor does it grow" <-- did you mean to say 'worse' at the end? It seems like it would fit in there, and also uphold the rhymes, but maybe you meant to cut off.
"The tinniest of nuance forever will it glow" <-- tiniest has just one 'n'.
Thanks for entering this, and thus supporting my attemtps to run Aps largest poetry contest
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Well actually I had written this as such in the spelling and wording from old school words. I actually have a dictionary that is 124 years old, which I use and research on-on words that aren't used anymore in todays time. They are just more intriguing to me. But if you would like me to make corrections as you pointed out with todays spelling and grammar for this particular contest I will.
I truly appreciate your comment and your constructive criticism, it's always nice to know what other readers see in one's work to where we all know what type of revision's that we need to do to make our poetry jump out to others.
And thank you for giving me the opportunity to participate in your contest!
It's nice to meet you!
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Ah, no, not at all for the corrections; I don't require people to take on board what I say, they're all just suggestions it's nice to come across a poem that has had a lot of work go into it too!
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Well I appreciate that, truly. But I don't want anyone to be confused by my writings, I really don't mind making any simple changes if, it is to create a better understanding of my words. I also want people to be able to "get" the full affect of it, to where it's more enjoyable than confusing.
And keeping in mind that I am somewhat new here to AP and have began entering into some contest, I understand that perhaps I may have to do some revising.
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Wow I could not pick just on stanza as my favorite they are all my favorite. I liked the wording you used.
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I put alot of work into this piece here, did alot of vocabulary studying and in depth thinking to produce this particular piece. I was intending to revise not my style of writing but my style of thinking, to see if I could change in metaphors on how I write poetry. I like to try and write different things in different ways, which means I have to think out of the box so to speak.
Thank you for your comment.
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Lisa
There is a song.. Im your puppet . and as i read the fabulous piece of poetry I am reminded of that. I can here the music. There way your protray an enslaved heart is brilliant. Life, not always so cheery. But the magic of your words just wonderful.
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Thank you Mr.Bob for your comment. I had to do alot of deep thinking for this particular poem, but it was worth it to me!
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excellent!!
Every line displayed a deepness, and flow that seemed effortless. the rhyme was onpoint also, im once again impressed.
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Thank you Swan. I enjoyed scribing this piece, I love going into depths when I write to where it overwhelmes me......I find satisfaction in it.
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