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Broken Butterfly

Being with you gets me in a way that I never thought it would

Reckless, careless, crying out in much pain to this world

Over the nighttime's darkened skies

Killing loves broken eyes

Ever wanting to be within the circle of your arms

Never to be there, far from harm

 

Busting out of the never ending mold

Utterly broken, never to fold

Torn into little bitty shreds

Tearing up and wishing that I could be dead

Effectively running far away

Raging out of control day after lonely day

Frantic words spill out of my mouth

Loss of control, forever to my spouse

You are there, I am here, never once to ever be near

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 12
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    Aw some of these writes really make me feel sad, because I can relate to them so much right now.


  • HugsForEveryone
    December 4, 2008

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    This is pretty good, but I thought the first two lines didn't flow very well and the rhyming was a little off.
    But other than that this was good
    ~Docteh


  • sunoir
    November 16, 2008

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    I really like this form. I can feel the anguish in the write and I love to feel the words. such a good title for your write it so fits.


  • Draig aine gold member
    November 14, 2008
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    thumbs up

    re words good lucheallt well done, grea use of th


  • FlamesDragoness
    November 10, 2008

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    Acrostic is a fav.poetic form of mine, and you
    wrote this piercingly.
    Lovely usage of simile's that tore our wings of flight,
    to feel the anguish in your written poem.
    fearless is your ink and heart!
    well done!
    well done!
    flamesdragoness


  • Draig aine gold member
    November 9, 2008

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    liked it

    very well done, but you havve to struggle to read over the graphics, your words ring, do not hide them


  • XScreamMeALoveSongx
    November 7, 2008
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    wow, This is just amazing. thanks for entering.


  • Wulf-Eyez De Winter gold member
    November 6, 2008

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    WOW....i bet if i had paid attention to your poems...maybe we could have gotten along...from your poems...we seem to have a bit in common....some things.....not so much....truly you really are a beautiful person in rl....and i wish you the best of luck in everything you try to accomplish.....oh and thank you for sharing your beautiful poetry for this site to read...your poems make me sit here and think..."My life isnt so bad...why am i sitting here moping (sp?) around for?" thank you ........sister

    ~Cassandra

    AKA Wulf-Eyez De Winter


  • eccentrikchild
    November 6, 2008
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    This is beautifully sad. Heartbroken. I love line 10. Very deep and emotional.

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