Do not let the unknown deter your soul.
The time will come when you are confronted
with the choice to lose yourself in all that
is new and strange to your small universe.
The infinity within you is more
staggering than all the heavens dreamed up.
For they were made up by your hopes and dreams.
Within you, there dwells a fathomless hell.
Be not afraid to delve there. For the most
precious gems can't be found on the surface.
A contest entry
- Let your mind explore by Learning2PaintYou.
550 points, ended November 8, 2008, 33 entries
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This is a beautiful poem. Short and sweet! thanks for entering!!
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this is such a wonderful idea, and so beautifully put forth.
its so true, also. i believe in this with all my heart.
p.s. its "lose" rather than "loose".
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Thanks! And also thank you for noticing the grammar error. Read it many times, but I never noticed it.
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I appreciate the meaning of this poem. I don't really like your wording when you said, "fathomless hell" and go on about "precious gems." Gems are beautiful and as you said, precious. Hell is not that kind of place. Maybe you could say a complex abyss or something. I understand where you're going, I just don't think "fathomless hell" is the right phrase.
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hmm I've always thought that when you "go through hell" you come out better. I wasn't meaning a biblical hell. But I appreciate your criticism and understand what you mean. Thank you!
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