There is a storm on the horizon;
it's going to ruin this bright shining day,
so I guess we better go inside,
before everything turns gray.
But we can't just wait for the storm to pass
we need to learn to dance in the rain,
because if we wait all day for the rainbow,
we will surely drive ourselves insane.
We should go dance around until the rain stills,
then we will see a beautiful rainbow
in the horizon above the hills.
Author notes
everything will be okay. just wait the storm out then you can have your rainbow 
--Missa
A contest entry
- The Secret of Life by Olivias Violin.
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Comments
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I love the metaphor
It shows that if we wait for the brighter day to come, it might take a while and make us angry. So we learn to make the rainy days better and learn to cope with it. Again I love how this has a double meaning and you did a great job.
Good luck,
- A.C.
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It is beautiful.
Comparing hard times to the storm, and the brighter days to the rainbow.
It shows strength. Not waiting around to be handed the good times, but going after them.
It is simple, and beats around the bush.
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I like this, straight and to the point, but watch out for filler words like "but" Any word that doesnt really need to be there, sometimes it sounds better without it. You have a wonderful piece here, Thankyou for entering my contest, and Good Luck!
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Great display of hope and strength to push on. We cant wait for life to hand us everything or else we will sit in rainstorms forever. Wonderful write!
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I liked this alot it shows strength and brilliance well done and good luck!!
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this is really great i can see how the hope and sunshine in this can change a person's mind about not just suicide but almost any hard part, i do enjoy dancing in the rain, best of luck in the contest
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i liked this good luck
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this was really good i like the msg it gives thanks for entering my contest
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just what i was looking for! rainbows and happiness and inspiration. i love the metaphoric theme and the rhyme scheme. good luck!
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A great entry
thanks for taking part, wishing you luck would be an insult to your talent
so take care
message me for anything
Billy (Rhythm Child -
"we need to learn to dance in the rain,
because if we wait all day for the rainbow..."
- I LIKE THIS A LOT
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thankyou very much for entering
i wish you all the best of luck
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I think you got it right even though using only eleven lines
A positive message you have here, with a pleasant rhythm.
May you always see rainbows
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Nicely done with this... lines seem fine to bring this message and the idea of making the most of our time is a wonderful piece of advice for us all...well done...PK
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Simply put: Enjoy life, don't wait for perfection, for whatever to come true...enjoy while we search for perfection.
I hear you, I will do as you say...I better see a rainbow though!
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i like rhyming poems and i loved the flow it had to it.. it was a very positive poem and i think u sent a good message that i believe in personally....
great job on it and good luck on the contest
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i disagree with you on this one... this one even with a words limit you got it right!!!
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thanks.
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This was brilliant and a postive piece for a positive outlook on life!!!!
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oooo that was a good one
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WOAH! How did you read it that fast? i just clicked the button!
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idk but i clickd on the home page and it was there after that i am a fast reader >.<
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