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Copper Wired Deception { Silver }

Envy not

for I am no longer perfect

Deceiving you,

deceiving myself..

 

Forbidden loyalties,

devoted vows

uttered once

never to be repeated..

 

Grasping the pain,

fall bended knees, I plead

forgiveness in sorrows wept

awash in copper wired hell.

 

To the lover I bedded today

secret to the liaison of lust

 

To you the man I once honored

and wore the band of gold.

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matthew slade
malachite formation 2
it was found on obsessionart.com

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  • penman gold member
    November 10, 2008
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    Excellent

    What a great creation. So very well done. Congratulations on the silver


  • Abe 1
    November 10, 2008

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    wowza dis 1 is fab
    well done on ya silver me lady
    spoke de way many guess feel
    grt title 2
    cheers abe


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 8, 2008

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    Such a deep write inspired by that prompt! Guilt can be a terrible burden!

    Congrats on the deserved Silver!


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    November 8, 2008

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    this piece is a very emotional one. the emotional pain that I felt while reading this was incredibly sad and intense. this poem is wow. at this point I'm having trouble coming up with the right words.

    good luck
    kat


  • chilali
    November 7, 2008

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    Shit! Hahha. This is like..wow! What an incredible take on the picture. I love this soo much!! Can anyone say GOLD? 'cause I can! hahaha! Well done and good luck. Not that you need it though


  • Midnite wolf gold member
    November 7, 2008

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    wow, another amazing write, so deep and powerful, the title is fantastic, good luck in the contest hun, x x


  • onesugar gold member
    November 7, 2008

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    This to me feels like guilt after a fling/affair. I get the feeling of betrayal and the hurt that can be felt by all involved. A powerful read.
    Good luck with the contest.
    ~sugar~


  • LadyDementia gold member
    November 7, 2008

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    Wow, strong air of guilt to this! Don't know why but the first few lines had me thinking about a vicar being unfaithful to god...lol. Way to early An excellent write sis, good luck in the contest


  • maralisa silver member
    November 7, 2008

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    aw julie a brilliant poem so deep and powerful I can relate to your poem absolutly wonderful good luck in the contest my friend your muse is on fire take care maralisa


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    November 6, 2008
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    This is beautifully done sis!!! You are truly amazing!!! I love this piece!!!!


  • Topaze
    November 6, 2008
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    A fine piece, enough to tear one in two, my best wishes.


  • daviscth
    November 6, 2008

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    This is another of your masterpieces sis and I just love the title. It's great. Good luck in the contest.

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