Once upon a lifetime
Not so very long ago
a star fell from the heavens
and landed here below
It was a little baby star
it shined with all its might
it glimmered and it flickered
for someone to see its light
somewhere close that very night
two people saw the sight
they closed their eyes and made a wish
and held each other tight
They wished upon that shooting star
for a child they both could love
They looked and saw that tiny light
that had fallen from above
They picked the little fallen star
up carefully in their hand
With smiles and tears they both agreed
This was something God had planned
For in their hands as they looked down
Into that shining light
A little baby girl lay there
A beautiful delight!
She grew into a loving soul
for all the world to see
The star that fell from heaven
My sister....Amanda Lee!
Author notes
This is a poem I wrote expressly for my only sister. I will be giving it to her for Christmas. What do you think?
How does this poem make you feel? What was your general impression?
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i liked the rhyme scheme to this poem and i also think that your sister is lucky to have a sibling who would go through the trouble of writing some like this for them, you did a great job
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I love it. Its so cute
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Beautiful..and amazing.
^_^
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AWWWWWWWW this felt like i was reading a childs story. It was very touching and veryy cute. I think this would b perfect for your sister. This piece made me feel warm and gooey inside. I wish i had a lil sister. LOL
Nice write!!!
**St@rR**
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Hi!
Thank you for the kind comments. Glad you liked it
Best regards
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Ooo. This poem was so very sweet. I am sure your sister will enjoy this. You could always have it set in calligraphy, lol. Anyway, this was beautiful and made me smile. Good work.
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Very nice, loving with a touch of whimsy. I think she will like it a lot! Good rhyme and rhythm, and I enjoyed reading it.
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i love this completely and im sure so does Amanda Lee. very sweet.
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what a precious poem. I would be thrilled to get a poem like this from my sister.
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Thank you!
I hope she likes it as much! How about reading my ne w Christmas poem please? -
Thanks so much! I hope she feels the same way!:}
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i think that your sister is going to love it i know i did
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I like this a lot. Definitely wouldn't mind if I was referred to as a star
In this stanza:
They wished upon that shooting star
for a child they both could love
They looked and saw that tiny light
that had fallen from above
I would consider taking out "both" which I think might make the flow a tad better
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