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Goodbye, I love you

Goodbye, I love you

 

Oh baby, you’re who I’ve always wanted,

And now you’re rejecting me,

Give me a chance or another winter

And I’ll show that we were made to be.

 

I loved you and I needed you,

But I had to let you fly free,

You forgot the things we used to do,

And now I see you’re rejecting me.

 

I waited for over a millennium,

But still we hadn’t kissed,

You’re still worth more than a million,

But now I still haven’t got what I wished.

 

So it’s time for me to say goodbye,

But with a laugh and tears in my eyes,

It’s time to let go of my first love,

Let it fly up above…

 

(And when the sky up above is blue)

It’s time to whisper…

“Goodbye, I love you.”

 

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  • im just human
    1 day ago
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    wonderful
    keep goning


  • Tears-of-Love
    October 28
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    hey really good write. your not alone. it always hard to let go of your first love


  • xBloodPromisedx
    September 1
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    Why are you done? I loved it.


  • PerVirtuous
    July 31
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    Looks exactly like a first poem! Thanks you so much for entering.


  • kanwal Malik
    June 13

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    i am lost

    Iam again lost in ur words......
    " (And when the sky up above is blue)

    It’s time to whisper…

    “Goodbye, I love you.”

    but goodbye i love ur poems



  • wow

    wow......
    wat a innocent n nice feelings i realy like it

  • ElectricBloom
    January 11

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    this is beautiful,
    so full of emotion and gorgeous imagery. i'm never normally a fan of rhyme but i think this is excellent. you hold brilliant flow throughout. i love the line :

    Give me a chance or another winter

    simply beautiful.
    and i love the ending stanza, what a perfect way to end such a wonderful piece. it's just so cute, but heartbreaking. it truly leaves the reader in awe.

    thank you! i truly enjoyed reading this.

    ElectricBloom

  • JustRockinOut
    December 21, 2008
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    JustRockinOut

    Love is the recognition of yourself in others and the delight in it


  • theburninglegend silver member
    December 14, 2008

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    great piece

    Sometimes when you need to show your deepest love, you have to let go of that person's hands and watch as they fly away, I see the emotions you mingled with here to pieced this poem together, and I applaud you for that. Great job my dear poet


  • BluesMan gold member
    November 20, 2008
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    SOmetimes you have to love people from a distance. This gives you a chance to lear to love yourself. For any relationship to work you first have to love and respect your self. Then you'll know the love and respect you give another is pure and not just ano


  • A63-Angel
    November 9, 2008
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    a sad but beautifully written piece

  • Bob Fox
    November 7, 2008

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    My

    such a swet and tener write from the heart of a yopung poet. Love, in it's many ways, often has an ending. But perhaps a new beginning also. Write on young poet & enjoy AP.


  • She burns
    November 6, 2008

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    How beautiful, heartfelt and very touching this is, so sad too, how painful and hard it is to let go of someone you loved this much...

    It almost made me cry, the love her is unconditional and always will be...

    Absolutely amazing


    • Sweet-Sins
      November 7, 2008
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      thx so much- glad u liked it, hope tu post some more soon!! bii
      xxx


  • Faded Existence
    November 6, 2008
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    This was sad... but the ending was beautiful!

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