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Who am I


  Who am I

I am myself
I am the present and I am the past
I am my father my grandfather
And his father before him
Stretching back to infinity
My children are the future
And will in time become the past

I am a friend
And I am an enemy
I am truth and I am lies
I’m weak and I am strong
I can love and I can hate

I am human.

A contest entry

I need help with this one, i have been told on a few occations that this not poetry. perhaps prose?

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • kill the lights
    January 11

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    PFFT. "NOT POETRY."
    That, my friend, is a lie and a half.

    I love this, it's short but it can stand on its own and it rings so true every time (:

    Looking forward to reading more of your work!
    Love,
    dh ♥


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    November 14, 2008
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    Brilliant!!

    You have expressed perfectly what it is to be human. The misanthrope judge who blatantly rejects good poetry is not a poet at all... and I quote, "Learn the rules (in poetry), then forget them. ~Basho". (I've already forgotten the contest judge's idiotic comments, as well.) Great work, keep on keeping on!! Peace always, xx Cyn


  • Arkbear gold member
    November 9, 2008

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    Hello

     

    I am sorry, but I can see you have not taken the time to read the Rules for the POW Contest ~

     

    Rules are put into place for good reason......and you have broken most of them ~

    Also....placing sooo much emphasis on ( I ) throughout your work is not Creative......therefore, this Theme is not considered Creative and would not score very well on your Judges scoreboards ~

     

    I am sorry, but we can not score your work this week.....hopefully you will read the Rules and join us again next week......thank you for entering & God bless you,

     

     

     

    Bear ~

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    November 7, 2008

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    Hi there First off let me say that you need to read the rules you are forgetting some things in your Authors notes as for your poem it is a nice piece but not a very uncommon theme good luck in the contest be well


  • SilverQ
    November 6, 2008

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    Nice! Good luck in the contest.

    ~Going for top comments, I'm to poor to applaud~
    ~Please stop by and see my work! ~

    God bless

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