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Hold Me

Missing image

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Melting into you seemed so right,
even though our paths have shifted.

My pulse pooled heavy beneath my breast.
as the sediment of love
traveled within the trembles.

Unable to gather the will to step,
surrendering this moment
to the should have been.

Your gaze seemed to add flame
to each tear...

 

Uncertain, I writhe

lost within wishes

...as you bury deeper
your hold on me.

 

Visions of us

far away in paradise

a bliss too perfect to believe.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Beret55 silver member
    March 26
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    Now thats poetry. Verry good. Lots of emotion.


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    February 16

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    excellent

    Wozers
    This is awesome sis
    Congrats on the gold trophy
    Hugs
    Your sis
    Susan~~~


  • Dragonbabyx3
    February 15

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    A beautiful picture to go along with a fantastic write! This is a beautiful piece, albeit a sad one! Wonderful work!


  • fairytalelovestory
    February 15
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    great write. well deserving


  • Amera gold member
    February 15

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    You have taken the feeling of love and painted it into a beautiful picture of inner emotion with words. I can see why this poem won a cold trophy, it's wonderful.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • usefuldistraction
    February 10

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    Oooh, beautiful...Stanza 2 exquisite poetic imagery...
    rich, lush, sensuality. Enjoyed deeply by this poor writer.


  • Cerulean Sunrise
    February 8

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    Sigh with added sigh...

    Congrats on the gold.

  • Ah..the paradise..again and again is there in the words..making this verse a piece of the magical mommnets..well done my friend...


  • ceegeeess
    February 6
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    Thank You for sharing Your Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet delila.


  • truembrace
    February 1

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    so many of us have had such bittersweet emotions and it's wonderful to read them here and realize that it's not just one person that goes through such things to empathize.

    a very well done poem that had me "into it" from beginning to end.

    I can see why this got gold!

    Kim


  • Desire gold member
    December 12, 2008

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    OMG~

    Holy Mackerel this tugs at the Heartstrings
    Passion packed but also tear stained
    Excellent images yet painful to inhale~
    You did a mighty fine job on this Hot Momma
    Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
    -Throws confetti-
    Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo


    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Voice~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet One
    Best wishes too
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Swan song gold member
    November 29, 2008
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    SIGH IN A BIG WAY!!!!


  • thejollytinker
    November 28, 2008

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    Your voice is unique, gonna read more in the morning. And your family pictures made a big smile grab me! We are indeed blessed, no?


  • Age of Rain
    November 21, 2008

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    coolness. On the pic AND the poem. It is both loving and sensual. A gentle blend of the two. I just wonder if this is visions of the past or the present?


  • Arizona Sunset
    November 21, 2008

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    wow I triple gold this one! I was sucked into this visually appealing and lovely written poem congrats! love ya~ Trisha~


  • adsaige
    November 20, 2008

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    Brilliant. Mama Jin chose Gold perfectly...such beautifully written stanzas with sensuality oozing from it.


  • BeautifulXxDisaster silver member
    November 20, 2008

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    Visions of us

    far away in paradise

    a bliss too perfect to believe.

    fave lines dear... much enjoyed.. congrats on the gold it was well deserved..


  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    November 18, 2008

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    A very Gold deserving poem. I love the emotions that the poem makes the reader feel, almost a sadness with the lover's desperate attempt to spark a romance, that is heading far from that...


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    November 16, 2008

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    Congratulations on this geat write!
    Always a pleasure to read your work
    here my friend!




    Jeremy0826

  • Amethyst MoonShadow
    November 15, 2008

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    Congratulations on your trophy! This really is so well written. Expressions are vivid upon the heart in yearning. Beautifully written and a joy to read!


  • Todays Poem Box
    November 15, 2008
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    Today's Poem: 11/15/2008


  • j i n gold member
    November 15, 2008

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    Uncertain, I writhe

    lost within wishes

    ...as you bury deeper
    your hold on me.

    Fantastic write! this is everything I wanted and more, thank you so much!
    Much love,
    jin


  • gllarso
    November 10, 2008

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    Beautiful and haunting in it's sadness. I can hear the longing and conflicting emotions in your words.
    "...as you bury deeper your hold on me." I love this line, it seems to embody the hopelessness of your struggle. Beautifully written as always.

    -Garrett


  • tara wilson gold member
    November 9, 2008

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    "My pulse pooled heavy beneath my breast." & I also love the gaze adding flame to tears...

    this is beautifully sad=(

    [last line, the first to should be too]


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 7, 2008

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    A stunning wite hun! Gripped my heart in it's sadness.. you are such a powerful writer!


  • thepoetssoul
    November 6, 2008

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    What an exellent penning filled with tremendous emotion and depth.You have poured some brilliance into this poem,it's remarkable.
    Perfectly exacuted on this prompt
    Best of wishes to you alway's.

    Anthony


  • Pure Thought silver member
    November 6, 2008
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    Sadly beautiful. You always write exquisitely.

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