hope is like a cat
frozen
before the pounce
A contest entry
- xx Short Poems. May The Best ShortWrite Win! xx by Midnight-x-Rose.
700 points, ended March 31, 111 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Well now, this is beautifully put. I definately agree with you here, couldn't have put it better myself. Great choice of words in such a few amount.
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confused
I apologize but I am totally confused. I got lost by line 5. I think this could have been good and not akward. At the beginning I was getting excited I thought it was gonna be some kind of an analogy until I got to the part about the flag. The last line you could have phrased it in such a way where the poem could have explained the title and then put a twist on it for the analogy. on the last line you could rephrase it to talk about catching your victim perhaps a mouse, or somethong it was chasing.
. Rewarded 8
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This poem was written for a contest prompt. I cut this, due to your comment about being confused. This may not help you but I am satisfied with this membership in my collection of around three hundred poems.
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