Keep a watch for the one who makes you whole
For years stare into the oblivion
Let the fog consume your emotions
And make you think your love will come
It doesn't matter if the sun won't shine
Or the world falls apart around you
You just wait for that arrival
For the day when you'll be happy again
Keep that hope in your heart alive
Do not let death murder your soul
And above all, don’t let anyone tell you the truth;
The train won’t come
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Pumpykin
Picture prompt, option 9: http://malleni.deviantart.com/art/Into-the-unknown-102575163 ^-^
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let the fog consume your emotion - a very brilliant line
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great write, I like the ending a lot
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Nice :)
Good job , good luck
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Thankss ^^
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when true love comes it will be well worth waiting for...sometimes we have to get the others out of the way but then when we least expect it there they are before us...very good! and thank you kindly for sharing it with me
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Thank you, glad you like it ^-^
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We are afraid to move on, but also to look behind... we need to find the strength in knowing the unknown isn't always a bad thing, it can be good just as long as we keep our eyes open for something better than before.
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Your poem is so inspiration but I don't think that I'm going to be able to take its advice. It's speaking about waiting for the time when everything is right again, but what if nothing is ever right again, what if the world is forever changed. However, I think there is definite hope in this piece and a need to hang on, because in life that's all we have sometimes.. that faint hope and a need to survive in the face of it all. Bravo
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Thank youu
Well the 'advice' isn't necessesarily directed towards the reader itself, but more towards the fictional character it resolves around; it's a picture prompt, I'll get the picture up so you can see it
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