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the last time

I knew it was time to go,
that we must be parted.
Separated by communication,
we both left empty handed.

The courage of our love,
came too strong.
We grew to each other,
like nothing was wrong.

But oh so mistaken,
our hearts have been broken.
With nothing but courage left,
we stand our ground.

With our lives apart,
the love lingers.
The fondness grows softer,
sweetened with time.

Maybe one day
you will enter my life,
as quickly,
as you came the last time.

Author notes

~~"If you're gone~maybe it's time to come home...
There's an awful lot of breathing room but I can
hardly move"

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  • Blue Rew silver member
    November 15, 2008

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    I like how this strongly relates to real life.
    That which we pull away from usually makes
    bittersweet memories of the highest degree.
    Display and relation to the prompt are well-done.
    Best to you with this. Blue


    • jezz
      November 16, 2008
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      thanks blue
      this is one of my more favoured songs by matchbox twenty, it never fails to make me think about my past and future.
      jezz


  • still.she.waits
    November 7, 2008

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    people slip into and out of our lives so quickly sometimes, but always for a reason, i believe. and we all need room to breathe sometimes.
    this is bittersweet


    • jezz
      November 8, 2008
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      thank you for you kind words. im really glad you were able to appreciate my write


  • suseann
    November 7, 2008

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    Absents does for sure make the heart grow stronger. This illustrates the need to take a step back to see something up close.


    • jezz
      November 8, 2008
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      thank you muchly for your comment
      sometimes circumstances force you to step back, perceptions becoming more aware because of that.
      and yes the absence is blissful torture. its courage and hope that i hold left.
      hope for my love of her not to leave me, and courage to pursue when the time is right.
      but truly it could just be a dream that the right time will come, and whether in reality the moments we shared, will come back again.

      happy birthday
      im happy i had the opportunity to write this for the competition

      jezz


  • michael13
    November 6, 2008
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    Beautiful

    this is a great poem i really enjoyed it.
    Blessed Be
    ~Starla~

    • jezz
      November 8, 2008
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      thank you very much, im really glad you were able to appreciate it


  • Susan John Francis
    November 6, 2008

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    Yeah "With our lives apart,
    the love lingers.
    The fondness grows softer,
    sweetened with time."

    Why could'dt we understand it when we were near .
    Now miles apart this heart falling apart because of the space felt empty inside.
    Disscussing it with noone,
    Like a fool time went by.
    Missing you now but yeah the courage begans to take its place once again.
    Nice one my friend. Fools we are did not realise it before.
    God Bless
    Susan


    • jezz
      November 8, 2008
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      thank you for your kind words im really glad you could appreciate my writing. this one was a special case, we didnt even have the chance to be near to each other. which is very different to what i have experienced before

      this write is dedicated to the raw emotions of love, and how hope and courage may produce something in the future.

      jezz

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