among the mist of confusion
deep within the shades of grey
a light beckons me forward
of rainbow colored rays
i see myself descending
lost from my own sight
depression and illusions
my only source's of comfort
i reach from my own prison
through bars of my own hurt
feel the warmth of heaven
as i break out of my own-self
A contest entry
- PIF/Picture Inspired by AliceinPoetryLand.
1200 points, ended November 7, 2008, 12 entries
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Hello sweetheart,You have penned here a wonderful write.Your descriptions of pain,the reader can feel.
These lines here....I reach from my own prison
through bars of my own hurt
feel the warmth of heaven
as I break out of my own-self....I really like alot! Wonderfully put!
Much love and happiness I send to you.
~Angel-anne~
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A journey from confusion in misty insubstance, bravely taking the effort of will to step from the familiar (how ever little we like it) and reach for something warm and beautiful.
The strength found within self to leave behind a prison of hurt, "as I break out of my own-self" will grow in the soil of thoughtfulness toward others, better than it could in the trap of self-preoccupation. Very thoughtful and insightfulwrite.
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damn you!
making me cry...
I can relate to this poem more than you know.
For these are true thoughts and feelings you speak through words... Why is it that depression can comfoart and destroy us? Why is it that we feel we need to escape from ourselves??? What is soo bad about being us? being yourself.. other people do it just fine, why is so hard for me? Just when you think you know.. things change...
"I see myself descending"
dammit me too.... -
Yes I agree, this is very nicely penned indeed. A most creative take on the phot
Thanks so much for your entry.
Gaylene
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I like this.Sometimes one does need to break free of themselves and the things that they are feeling.Your writing is beautiful.If we can only see through anothers eyes and live with their pain then I believe our own would not feel so bad.Good luck in this contest.
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thank you
both for your kind words and comment......if only we could see through others eyes i agree there.....life may no seem as bad if we could even if just for a moment.....i'm glad you enjoyed and liked this poem......i'll be sure to check out some of yours.....coz i have a feeling i'm gonna find another favorite on here once i do......bless you awlays
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