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The Working Girl

She was up all night

Caressing and being caressed.

 

She was up all night

Her legs astride.  

 

The morning light shone bright,

She watched her 'client' sleep.  

 

She rose from the bed,

Her body fully nude,

She tip-toed on the cold marble floor

Hurriedly to reach the warm shower.  

 

The pure water,

Washing away last night's adultery.

She felt her body being cleansed.  

 

She turned the tap..

Water stops..  

 

She slowly caught the towel hanging from the shower rod

and dried her milky white skin,  

 

Her hair still wet,

Drops of water still on her body

Her succulent breasts still uncovered  

 

She walked out into the cold room once again

to collect her clothing    

 

She found his electric blue eyes

Wide open  

 

He looked at her and smiled.

"Shall we go for another drive?"

 

Author notes

Picture Credit: Marty Provost, it's called Astride


This is probably my fourth attempt at Adult fiction poetry. Sigh. I don't know if its any good or not, or if it is even relevant, but yes, this story is the one that popped into my head with this picture.

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  • Zenda-Lokki silver member
    December 10, 2008

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    Fantastic imagery and use of words makes this poetic story all the better. A wonderful piece to read, thank you so much for sharing it with me xx


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    December 10, 2008

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    wow...I really like the story in your poetry...and I really like the title...lets the reader know right away what she is up to! This is an awesome take on the prompt...very unique and cleverly written!

    - tossing more roses to you!





  • Mistressofthedark
    December 4, 2008

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    I LOVE THIS!

    The wording was perfect, I loved the imagery! Amazing! Very nice! One of the best I've read in a long time!


  • Rhythm Child
    November 30, 2008

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    The pure water,

    Washing away last night's adultery.

    She felt her body being cleansed
    << i loved the way you worded this, your sensual writes are so........sensual and your imagery is amazing, you writting is so subtle yet so effective


  • Joseph Hollis
    November 22, 2008

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    Trying new things expands the horizons. I think you did an excellent job here. Once again, I must say that you're a wonderful storyteller. One doesn't often see people write about this particular theme. It was a refreshing read. Well done.


  • Alyzeh
    November 9, 2008

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    Okay, so firstly, congratulations on the trophy. Second, I can never write such poetry, so to me, it's like super awesome, I mean the imagery was superb. It was like a short tale with clear pictures. Great writes Ylova. I wonder when I'll start writing like you. Haha.


    • chilali
      November 10, 2008
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      Thank you I know what you mean. I never thought I'd EVER write poetry like this. Haha. But when I joined AP, I don't know. Decided to try new stuff. Still. I don't know how many more of these I will write. Not really my style or type! Haha. And who are you kidding? You write waaay better 'child'!


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 9, 2008

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    I'll tell you what i know this is good, i mean i like the images in my mind that you have painted here, keep it flowing


  • Lencio Rodrigues
    November 8, 2008

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    Good! good! its very good as i had to explain to Praveen when he's eye's went zoink, when he read mine, that writing is only an art! and so, this is. You have done a great job with this, loved reading it, interesting ending!

    Lencio


  • Peteskid gold member
    November 7, 2008
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    It's good... ... PK


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    November 7, 2008

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    I love what you did with this pic.. I thoroughly enjoyed it a lot.. the imagery is fantastic here.. I'm so glad that you entered my contest..

    good luck
    kat


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 7, 2008

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    I like how you built a story around the picture, and made it more than just a sensual piece! Ahh.. the sins of the night before!!

    Nicely done!


  • LionessK silver member
    November 7, 2008
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  • solitaire
    November 6, 2008

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    Like the approach you took on this picture prompt contest. Strong visual language with a fly on the wall view of the vignette. Would like to see more mystery included Really enjoy your increasing range. I think you have a future in this genre.


  • HaileeDear
    November 6, 2008

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    oh damn! very strong, and i love the ending!
    i could just see his and her face.
    oh amazing, as every write ive read of yours.


  • Puppydog gold member
    November 6, 2008

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    FULL OF PASSION!!!

    So many men and women do this, I for one never have and don't ever want to, my passion is saved for that one special lady who will come into my life and love me for me.'s


  • JinSays gold member
    November 6, 2008

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    OHMY
    My little poetess, you shine like the SUN in this sweetheart.
    THIS IS GORGEOUS. THE ending is very surpsing, and hints at so much more to come. Yes, she's ready I think. What about him? Thnk he can handle it?
    LOL
    Wonderfully done honey, you are really getting very good at these writes.
    Love you always,
    jin


  • Hikari Lady
    November 6, 2008

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    This is an interesting write. I find it decribtive and full of imaginary. Rather I think you've talked about the phsycal being of Adulty rather than about the emotions that took over between them and how each reacted to the feelings they got upon being with each other.
    You show a lot of promise, my dear! I hate adulty but I might try it some day. You did very well, thanks for sharing!

    ~Noor

  • Bjarne gold member
    November 6, 2008

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    Good Piece

    There is promise in the things that "...pop in your head", glad you decided to share. If you like, I can offer some suggestions, may wish to do that via: email, if so, let me know www.dunswhisper@hotmail.com

    bj


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    November 6, 2008

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    Well done
    You have captured the image and set the scene
    The aftermath of the night of lust
    Wish you all the best in the contest hun
    Julie xx


  • Bob Fox
    November 6, 2008

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    Hey gal

    Now this is different but more common then most wil admit. That lady of the night who offers her favors. Often in a delicious . And why not? lol


  • thejollytinker
    November 6, 2008
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    That was really different- told a side of the story nobody likes to hear. Made me sad for her.


  • Ken-Maverick
    November 6, 2008

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    This is very good considering its only your fourth attempt. I like the imagery in this aswell,
    yes, well done and good luck in the contest

    All the best to you

    Ken


  • MD Masroor
    November 6, 2008

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    Not bad at all. You're getting really good at 'sensual' poems. Beautiful imagery and flow. Well penned! Good luck!


  • fairytalelovestory
    November 6, 2008
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    this is so descriptive and really good. ty for sharing

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