Underneath the stars tonight
we sit and contemplate
our existence together
and baby, it's then
that we realize that
we belong to the night
Lost in the moon
holding onto each other
looking in your eyes
I realize that you
were never really
mine
And here we are
lost in the stars
don't hold back now
cause baby this disaster
is falling apart as
we speak
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Comments
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This was really stunning, I loved the imagery and emotion that you portrayed!
The language was sweet and very well structured, I love your personal voice in poems.
Favourite lines:
"And here we are
lost in the stars
don't hold back now
cause baby this disaster
is falling apart as
we speak"
Almost a tragedy poem really adn tragedy is so easy to identify with.
Keep up the excellent writing,
--Stardust xx
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awww so pretty and heartfelt
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