Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

A wiser beauty to behold.

 

 

tender, nakedly exposed

no longer able...

to hide.....

her veil of aching

pride;

she screams....

for morning air,

"Let me breathe..

or be quick to take my life..."

 

Ever slowly, crawls

condemnations fog

taunting her sou;

quietly approaching

appears a silent dawn a-rising.

Gently placing on her shoulders

an eternal robe of hope

and unto this day...she lives

A wiser woman to behold.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

i

 

 


 

 

 

 

Author notes

contest prompt: 60 words!
under velvet sky
scarlet moonbeams
swims in her eyes
like the color of nocturnal poem
bleeding like flesh wounds....Sweet Sorrow

lovely, poem prompt and inspiration,
many ways to write it out.....
i hope you like it....
personally, I swum on these
shores..and I am thankful
for the dawn of each new day
it's eternal gift..robe of hope.

A contest entry

Please feel free to comment..it's how we all grow...

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments


  • Sweet Sorrow
    November 14, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    Excellent take on the given prompt. The imagery is good. Thanks for sharing and goodluck


  • Aimee Hill
    November 9, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    The imagery alone was enough to make my mouth water. Excellent job! Your choice of words is refreshing, as well as the smoothness of the flow. Of course, the image alone, is gorgeous... but combined with your words, it's breathtaking. Excellent job and good luck!!


  • humblpye gold member
    November 7, 2008

    Edit | Reply

    Tanalizing and Exquisite

    I think you have done anexcellent job with the prompt...as you say, many ways this could be done, think I would've had a shot at it myself had I seen it lol probably a blessing in diguise...

    A most uplifting poem/pic
    John


  • hoodoolover silver member
    November 6, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    I like this approach that you have taken with the prompt, 'tis a painful night at times is it not? Well written