the winds blow
making the whole world
shake. your lips lean into me
leaving poems
across my neck.
you hold me
like wind
holds fate,
blowing us to sleep
inside the moon’s heart.
Author notes
critques.
peace to all ~flight
A contest entry
- Farewell to Fall Invitational by Kikai Ni.
800 points, ended December 10, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
honesty
Comments
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I love your metaphor of love and poetry: very simple, but thought-evoking.
Your comparisons are, for a lack of a better word (for there is none), poetic. Very touching, well done
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add more. thats my only critique, because i loved it so much.
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