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lust in snapshots

camera licks skin
with simmering flash,

zoom closes in on
every imperfection,

shutter snaps
like the fluttering
of eyelashes;


curves caught perfectly
in still frame,


    for your enjoyment.

XOX

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  • Junkyard
    November 1
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    i dig it..made my mind wonder...great write


  • risewiththesmoke
    February 19
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    i love the sort of irregular rhyme, whether it was intentional or not


  • Plastic Dreams
    November 18, 2008

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    this is provocative and personable. i keep close touch with my own camera and much of the flesh of others. well written.


  • catalyst.
    November 14, 2008

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    I love this especially the second stanza.
    i could really relate to how it feels as though everyones pupils are set on zoom to examine my flaws.

    You have a brilliant way with words
    you can say so little, and yet say so much
    I really admire that


  • Dalaney gold member
    November 13, 2008
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    well done
    I like the small stanzas,
    and the ending line
    simply snaps!

    love, lane


  • Death of the Author
    November 6, 2008
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    Excellent opening

    "life the fluttering
    of eyelashes;" - very nicely done.

    Good work


  • Ryan79
    November 5, 2008
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    Good

    Love the metaphors. They make it all come alive. Short, but still good.

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