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You As A Study

Hey there your looking so scared.

Curling up in a ball hoping to disappear...

From the world around you.

Hoping nothing on this earth will ever find you.

 

Do you know where you can go?

To hide away hoping your face won’t show.

Down somewhere so far from here.

A place where it is impossible to fear.

 

I see you sitting there, in your chair, twirling your hair.

Should I approach you?

Because I care, do I dare, will you share?

What’s on your mind, what will I find?

 

You can’t always run away.

From your problems each & everyday.

Stay strong, head up & take a stand.

And if you need me, doll, I’ll be there to hold your hand.

 

I see you sitting there, in your chair, twirling your hair.

Should I approach you?

Because I care, do I dare, will you share?

Our eyes fix, our thoughts mix, I go to kiss your lips...

 

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  • Sadistic Psycho
    October 20
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    Wow

    Wonderfully put together.
    I like your work!
    Keep up the great work!


  • Darkend Light
    August 22
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    ur a great writter. i love ur pieces.
    i'd love to get ur opinion on some of mine


  • Oh.My.Juliet
    August 12
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    wow this is amazing, keep writing!

    x

  • Love it!!

    I love this, but I want to understand it better... First it is like she could hide, you would help her, but then you say she has to face her problems? Or are your giving her a choice of the two? Or are you saying that if she doesn't run away, if she faces her problems, she will be in a place where there is no fear? Or am I WAY overanalyzing this? LOL Sorry...


    • ForeverTorn gold member
      August 11
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      Hmm... That's a good question... It's been so long since I wrote it. It's more like, the refrain shows what the guy is thinking as he admires the girl... And the rest is what he wants to say to her if he ever goes up to speak to her... Basically the thought process is... There is a scared girl and the guy wants to help and be a shoulder, more or less... He has a connection with her, maybe sees a little bit of them self in her and is deeply drawn to her... and then he would confront her asking if she knows a place where she can go to feel safe because they are hard to find sometimes. But at the same time telling she can't keep running away from her fears and hiding... She needs to stand up for herself and become her own person... Hope that makes sense

  • msjuicytech
    August 5

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    Good Line

    "Our eyes fix, our thoughts mix, I go to kiss your lips..."
    Passionate. Nice.

  • wow...near...speechless...and wow. i can say ive never been the girl part in this..and more than likely never will be, but wow you make it lovely to dream

  • oH MY,THIS IS A COMPLETELY WONDERFUL PECE OF POETRT TENDER YET NOT OLD LADY LAVENDER
    I LOVE IT
    BRAVO
    t


  • Ann45 gold member
    July 23
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    Nice well done. good luck in the contest


  • Rick Weston silver member
    July 23
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    very nice write.


  • xXbrokenXstarXx
    November 5, 2008
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    wow. this is amazing. really. it's amazing.

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