Not sure of where she belongs
She wonders whats she done so wrong
To deserve this life shes been giving
And questioning why she still goes on living
His hands are not so nice at times
His voice screaming into her mind
Leaving her feeling all alone
In world she wishes she'd never known
Drugged down by lifes mistakes
Wishing that life had retakes
So She could stand strong
And prove them all wrong
She wants more out of life
Then heartache and strife
She wants to learn more about living
And make more out of the life she was giving
How much more time will it take
For her to learn from her mistakes
And take a stand
and never be mistreated again by any man
Author notes
Picture Credit: http://asbeautydies.deviantart.com/art/Some-sort-of-closure-60697780
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A contest entry
- May I Prompt You? VII - Physical Abuse by Manda Kathryn.
500 points, ended November 22, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be kinder than necessary, for everyone you meet is fighting some kind of battle!
Comments
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so beautifully written. it reminds me of how my dad used to abuse me. its so heart shattering, and so well written. this is amazing.
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Bravo!
Congrates on the HM, and keep up the wonderf, descriptive poetry!
Thanks for sharing here, you take care, and keep that pen flowing! 
Peace, Timothy aka poeticweaver
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The final stanza is the most powerful for me, there is that sense of longing and desire to help her realise she is better than all that
Great great write!
♥
Thank You & Best of Luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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very nice poem, the "giving" i think it should be "given" and the "then" should be "than". good luck with the contest
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Excellent Write
Wow now I really liked this one. This is just brilliantly written. Oh boy how I could relate to this poem. But thank God I got proffessional help. I hope many read this for I know many feel just as you wrote here and they won't have to feel so alone.
Your ryhme is flawless and the rythem and flow is great. The pic with the feelings and emotions with this poem like I said are just brilliant BEST WISHES in the contest but I think this is a winner anyway!!!
Wishing You Many Blessings
Much Love
Kelle Marie
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Excellent write! We all have to find that inner strength to never allow ourselves to be treated badly by others. Great write hun
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Excellent
So much feeling in this write. Well done, miss you
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MISS YA TOO...... how are you..?
thanks for the comment...!
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Wow, this is really good sissy.. so strong. you did such a wonderful job with this picture.. Love you sissy... Best of luck in the contest..
Angel
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