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Clarity

Clarity

Clarity , sweet peace
Calm, stress released

Beautiful stillness,
oh wondrous bliss
,delightful happiness

Oh what a way,
to transcend worries everyday
to escape dismal dismay

To get there focus my friend
on one beautiful thing,
the key to inner serenity

Rid yourself of disquieting thoughts,
let go, slip into silence

All  preoccupations and diversions are meddling
,come back to that one radiant thing continually

Experience this twice a day,
and you'll live life
,enjoying heaven on earth today

Author notes

Hi this is a very personal poem ,about how wonderful I feel centering prayer is and is a bit hard for me to let go into the wild ,but I hope you all like this poem .

Stevie.me

PS I love this site and everyone has made me feel very loved and at home here
,thank you . Somehow I feel a special bond with you even though I don't
know you . Thank you for your hospitality

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  • Shantti
    November 15, 2008

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    Since prayer is such a personal experiance it can be experienced in so many ways, and hundreds of people can do the same prayer and every one of the hundreds of people doing that prayer will have differant experiances with it. Some may be very similar, some exact in nature but with a differance here or there.

    Since it can be concieved so variously it's hard to describe it in a manner that everyone will understand, and therefor a very difficult thing to try to convey.

    I have a tendancey to do continuouse run on sentances, I'm sorry, I talk that way too.

    I love the feel of your poem and can identify completely. I've heard of centering prayer, but I call it meditation. Punctuation helps the feel of things written alot, and it's not something I'm real good at as you can tell by my run on paragraphs, but punctuations at the beginning of a line is a bit distractive. It can give a sense of individuality to a piece though.
    In prayer and meditation, there is no right or wrong way though is that not the truth? I guess that's what I percieve here by the misplaced commas.
    This poem is a joy to read and ponder.


  • Dark Otter
    November 15, 2008
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    Its an improvement!

    Put your commas directly after bliss, meddling and life (they are hanging from the wrong lines). That will help its appearance. I think with minor editing you will have the poem you want and the thoughts that you want to express.

  • Dark Otter
    November 14, 2008

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    Like this!

    A poem on meditation that speaks of it spiritual benefits. I have one suggestion: change last line to 'enjoying heaven on earth'