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Faint Memories { Silver }

Solitude confines me

upon rusted springs

where a mattress lays bare threads

once laced in passion.

 

Aroma's aftershave

faintly familiar,

stains the pillow

encased in memories, never fading.

 

Quilted sweats

sweetly arousing in energy's lust

now cold shivers

no warmth, no love.

 

 

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6. I reach for you in the night and your not there

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  • Judith Chandler
    November 13, 2008

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    There's a sense of intimacy about this that I really like and nice contrast at the end where you reveal that the warmth and love have gone ouf of the relationship.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 8, 2008

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    I felt a chill of loneliness reading it! Wonderful write hun!


  • Midnite wolf gold member
    November 7, 2008
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    great take on the prompt, as always so well written, great piece. x


  • Topaze
    November 6, 2008
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    A lovely piece very well written, thank you for your fine entry.


  • onesugar gold member
    November 6, 2008

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    I know this feeling Oh so well, reaching out for a love no longer there. Wonderful imagery and emotions throughout this piece.
    Good luck in contest
    ~sugar~


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    November 6, 2008

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    Your so amazing!! This is a truly brilliant write sis!!! I love it!! Excellent details and incredible description!!!


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    November 6, 2008

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    this poem is like really sad.. I can feel the emotions through it and the imagery is vivid and very strong. Excellent job with the prompt Mum.. The first 2 lines are like a smack in the face wow..

    good luck


  • aboomer silver member
    November 6, 2008

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    love the wording and images in this. I really love the lst verse and the line,

    'where a mattress lays bare threads' - such a powerful image!
    Excellent!
    best wishes in your contest.


  • daviscth silver member
    November 6, 2008

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    I felt the chills from reading this one sis. Your imagery never fails to be so strong. You did a wonderful job. Good luck in the contest. Love you


  • maralisa silver member
    November 6, 2008

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    aw julie my heart goes out to you your poem reflects an aching of loneliness and powerful emotions dwell good luck in the contest my friend take care maralisa


  • LadyDementia gold member
    November 6, 2008

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    Such sorrow lines each word, echoing loneliness and need Such a sad piece sis! Beautifully penned tho as always! Your muse never lets you down. Excellent emotions, all the best in the contest


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    November 6, 2008

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    Outstanding!!!

    So deep & so much said in so few words...
    Great visual narrative (as always) that enthralled throughout & made for a compelling read...
    Another fantastic write...
    Well done!!!


  • chilali
    November 6, 2008

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    Awww! So sad...But yet so beautiful. I love this. Best of luck in the contest! Definitely getting a trophy for this one! Yes you are

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