an eerie atmosphere grips
the heart with fright
within the catacombs of death
where clouds veil the night
Darkness lurks at every portal
beneath unconsecrated ground
Creatures watch attentively
while never making a sound
The innocent prey that fate
has led to this horrid place
have found a living hell
where there's no mercy
or saving grace
Deep in this chilling forest
where callous spirits unite
in search of virgin blood
to feed their lustful appetite
Hope recedes the dawn
taking flight into twilight
As cunning eyes pierce enchanted
souls and fades into the night
Cries of dreadful horror
serenade the moon
Hear the warewolves celebrate
their haunting lunar tunes
Poor unfortunate maidens
who've tipped the scale of fate
by wandering into a forest
where the trees are skeletons
beyond the gate
A contest entry
- "the trees are skeletons beyond the gate. . ." by JinSays.
937 points, ended November 7, 2008, 9 entries
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Comments
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Dark and sinister and quietly moving. YES, the rhyme scheme you have displayed here reads out like a fairytale rhyme.
EXCELLENT read, and fantastic entry. Thank you
jin -
I love it!!! Your details and descriptions are so truly excellent!!! You did a marvelous job as usual!!!! This is so very well written!!! You portrayed this piece very well!!! I love it!!!!! From start to finish this whole thing is magnificent!!! You could write a book you are truly a brilliant writer!!!!!!!!!!!
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Superb plus
A most unique, and horrific write. You've expressed your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us.
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WOW! This is great you did a wonderful job on this! Good luck in the contest
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How eerily majestic! You are very talented in that you are able to compose a moving piece on almost any subject or prompt! Your work is always worth reading....another job well done!
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This is Awesome..
I like the feeling within the poem..
Great Imagery..
Excellent work done
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EEERIEEEEE!!!!
THIS GAVE ME THE CREEPS...IT KIND OF GAVE ME AN INDICATION OF A PRELUDE TO WHAT HELL WILL BE LIKE ONLY HELL WILL BE FAR WORSE...YOUR IMAGERY WAS FRIGHTENING HERE AND I'M SURE JUST THE EFFECT YOU INTENDED!!!! THANKS FOR SENDING ME THE LINK TO THIS PIECE!!! AWESOME AS ALWAYS LOVED THE FORM AND THE CHOICE OF VOCABULARY AS WELL!!!!~~~TONI~~~
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Excellent
Very creative and well crafted use of dark side. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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Darkness at its very best
It breathes the atmosphere, the fear within , and tells of a poetic story that would frighten us to death
Best wishes and good luck
Julie
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