That face! And those eyes!
I couldn't do it to my surprise
barely had the courage to approach
through the pub's crowd and smoke
but I did, and she responded timidly.
I said "hi" as did she.
The moon lit her brilliant eyes up
something fierce was upon us
Everyone stared at us, jealous I think
to show off we gave each other a wink
She was beautiful through and through
she said "I think I recognize you"
In my drunken stupor I sat and stared
her face was also mine I feared
I never saw myself like that quite before
the mirror gestured at the door
At least my one true love was me
now if only I can recover my dignity...
Author notes
I don't have a true love yet, so this is the best I could do for the contest!
A contest entry
- PIF contest quick one by abe by Abe 1.
800 points, ended November 10, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pumpkin Pie by GypsyEyes.
400 points, ended December 22, 2008, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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this was really good! not something i was expecting to read so kudos to you for that! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox
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Wow, how intense...the vibes this gives out is grand lol congrats on the trophy
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haha luv it
been there me self
thanx 4 yr grt entry
cheers abe
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True love yet or not you have penned a great write
First love and the typical pub crawl lol!
Really like your words
Best wishes
Julie
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