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Death Laced Plea

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Bruises read like a book
pain and anguish within
bloodied tears fall so often
as yet again I conceal skin.

Confidence slowly sucked,
aspirations lay in shreds
white knuckle contact
fractured ribs, swollen head.

Longed for darkness comes
welcomed bleak abyss
wondering, will you even wake
or has death laid its final kiss.

Regretful tears come with pleas
never again, hand on heart
invisible chains grow tighter
and so the cycle starts.

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This was quite hard to write. Any form of abuse is wrong, and they ALWAY'S do it again!

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  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    November 22, 2008

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    Indeed they do always do it again which is a sad thing

    The flow of this had me so captured I nearly forgot it was abuot abuse, it flows so poetically down the page but with a strong perpose

    Fantastic write
    ♥
    Thank You & Best of Luck
    Stay safe
    ~Manda

  • Judith Chandler
    November 9, 2008

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    What a life that would be! All that concealment and shame as well as the abuse.

    It's a vivid write. Your notes are right from what I've heard. If you forgive them, they just take advantage of it.


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    November 6, 2008

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    You brought her pain and suffering to the raw surface hun
    Painted her thoughts, felt her tears
    Brilliantly penned
    Best wishes and good luck in the contest
    Sis


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    November 6, 2008

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    Wow!!! That was deep!!!

    You have excellantly captured the cycle of abuse...
    It is a hard subject to write...
    I can't do it myself, upsets me too much, so I applaud you that you have so skillfully with an overwhelming depth of feeling & intensity...
    Well penned, well versed, well done!!!


  • maralisa silver member
    November 6, 2008

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    a brilliant poem you have touched on the circle of abuse with deep brevity good luck in the contest maralisa


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 5, 2008

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    a strong poem that just makes me think of all those who suffer from abuse, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 5, 2008

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    You're so right! The cycle begins and it doesn't change! They always do it again unless they get some serious help, and how often does that happen! Not very...

    This is such a stark write, full of the truth of such a situation, the pain and emotion that goes with it.

    Really a hard hitting and strong write that will speak to many I'm sure hunny. Well done!

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