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If I Were Shirley

I wonder what my life would be like
If I had a total different life!
Many say I look like Shirley Temple,
others say I have my grandmothers dimples.
But if I were Shirley
I would have money.
If I were Shirley
I would look just like her.
Hair that was curly,
a voice that was soft and sweet,
oh I would be complete!
If I were Shirley
everyone would know me.
Many think I am funny like Shirley,
I kind of agree.
But if I were Shirley
I wouldn't know who I am today.

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  • DinkyDiver gold member
    May 13
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    i think this is very good but the name shirley feels over used within the write and I wonder if more could have been added to this as in emotion??
    I do like the structure of this poem though and I think you did well, thankyou for entering my contest and goodluck


  • AnnD Moderators member
    November 23, 2008

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    LOL oh this struck a chord with me for sure. My Mother used to adore Shirley Temple, and for all the years of my young childhood would 'perm' my hair, giving me ringlets, just like Shirley. She would dress me in fancy 'sickly pretty dresses etc etc....... UGH!! the thought of it now..........
    This really was a fun read and brought back many memories for me too.
    Thankyou for entering the contest I loved your entry.

    Ann


  • Scyphon
    November 14, 2008

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    Thats a great poem. And Im glad you're not Shirley bc then I wouldnt have had a chance to know you or read your poetry. Thank goodness for being you


  • Trill - Trickle
    November 5, 2008
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    Oh man this computer is slow!

  • Trill - Trickle
    November 5, 2008
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    I love you Renee'!!!

    • crnewmn
      November 5, 2008
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      I love you Renee'!!!

      Good poetry! Helps us see what inner thoughts you have. Reveals something about you. Peace comes from writing, courage comes from telling the truth, strength comes from endurance. Love comes from people like you. Be proud of yourself, as we are! renee'


  • Trill - Trickle
    November 5, 2008
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    This poem is so true because.... my family says I look like Shirley Temple!! LOL

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