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The Ghost Of Your Bride

She stands in these lonely woods,

In her simple flowing gown

That she was to wear on the altar.

 

It was tragic,

How her life ended.

It was tragic,

How she never got to say goodbye.

 

Forever her soul remains

roaming these woods.

that took her life

while she was searching

for the tree

upon which

your names were carved.

 

 

 

Author notes

60 words.
Picture Credit: http://frozenstarro.deviantart.com/art/Ghost-Whisperer-102555255

This is the first thing that came to mind looking at the picture, then there were lots of other ideas but I sort of liked this one the best and since it was the first and when I started writing it, it just all started to flow. I thought I'd stick to it I do not expect to win, it is not all that great but thanks for the great prompt and for helping me fuel my muse I enjoyed writing this poem.

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  • Joseph Hollis
    November 22, 2008

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    I'm going to reiterate the word "Wow!" This was a very haunting write filled with brilliant imagery. For some reason, I was reminded of Tim Burton's "Corpse Bride." I enjoyed this read.


  • Scyphon
    November 16, 2008

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    Wow, this was an amazing poem, sad in her loss but so captivating with love of her eternal search for the tree with their names carved within it. Fantastic read, keep 'em comin


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 11, 2008

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    all i can say is that this was golden, i loved the idea of someone in love that much, but it was saddening to know what happened to here. keep it flowing and congrads on the contest


  • Alyzeh
    November 9, 2008

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    Wow. Beautiful but sad, so sad. Sigh. A wonderful write Ylova. Imagery painted so well, even the picture goes great with your words. Excellent! Congratulations on the trophy!


  • LionessK silver member
    November 6, 2008

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    I agree with the others.. wonderful, beautiful and yes, it's like the picture was made for your words.
    well done.


    ~Kristy


  • KyleBerg gold member
    November 6, 2008

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    Deeply moving and beautifully written.
    Your words weave an elegant story of sadness which makes the heart ache.
    Congrats on the Honourable Mention; it was well deserved


  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    November 5, 2008

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    perfect ! perfect for this picture! your imagination and words are remarkable! i so understand the way you write. beautiful ylova!!!

    becca


  • MD Masroor
    November 5, 2008
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    Wow! Beautifully written! Amazing imagery! Congrats on the HM!


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    November 5, 2008

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    I also like where you took the prompt. I kind of think that maybe you can expand on this one a bit.. I would love to see it . such a sadness throughout this piece. kind of wondering what caused her demise..
    You did an excellent job with both the prompt & your poem.

    good luck
    kat


  • Xianaria gold member
    November 5, 2008

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    Nice, haunting take (no pun on she being a ghost) ~ I enjoyed the imagery & story within this write.

    Best wishes,
    Tim


  • HaileeDear
    November 5, 2008

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    imagery is my favorite, and there was so much in this piece. you've managed to describe the image, and what i would be thinking she is thinking and feeling.
    very powerful and emotional.
    nice work
    <3


  • MysticalRayne
    November 5, 2008

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    Beautifully done - and it flows so nicely best of luck in the contest


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    November 5, 2008

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    Searching .. a sad tragic and a beautiful write
    I loved the stanza relating to the tree..
    Good luck in the contest and best wishes always
    Much love Julie xx

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