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Last Breath

 

 

 

 

Butterflies float around me

trying to sway my mind

as my frustrations take over me

blood flows from my hands

 

slowly it drips and falls

signing my name to this paper 

my hollowed and broken heart

collapses instantly within me

 

as I slowly exhale

for the very last time

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt: #3
30-60 Words
Artist Credit:

http://ihatemonday.deviantart.com/art/SuicideNotes-n-ButterflyKisses-41215478

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  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    November 5, 2008

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    You did an excellent job with this prompt. you've captured the sadness and have expressed it nicely throughout this poem. I really love the first stanza. the emotions are quite intense within this ...

    good luck
    kat


  • chilali
    November 5, 2008

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    Great take on the picture Jeremy! I loved it! So sad but yet so beautiful. Well done and good luck to you in the contest


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    November 5, 2008

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    Sadly beautiful
    Your words spoke the tragic story, as it unfurls
    Best wishes and good luck
    Julie


  • MysticalRayne
    November 5, 2008

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    Awwwwwwww so very sad but very well written - best of luck in the contest