The trees are skeletons beyond the gate
Beyond the gate of life and death
Whosoever shall cross through it may never come back
As they will never of exsisted
Then how did they go through if they lived?
They can't....
In the beginning you shall choose a path
The decietful path to eden that is only a cover for a war-torn world called earth
Or a solemn cold path, a slow long path winding and snaking it's way through a huge old gate
Past that gate is a forest of old withered and dead trees
On this path you will go through never to return
What lies on this path?
If you were truly curious you would have chosen it to begin with
Live with your choices
For that is the only way to live
A contest entry
- "the trees are skeletons beyond the gate. . ." by JinSays.
937 points, ended November 7, 2008, 9 entries
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What lies on this path?
If you were truly curious you would have chosen it to begin with
I disagree with this line, and as a matter of fact, I feel a little offended at the implication that I don't make my own life choices the RIGHT WAY, and AM THEREFORE DESERVING of my pain and suffering.
That's just my own personal reaction. I can see there is genuine care for human suffering in your message, even if it comes off a little preachy.
thank you for your entry, and best wishes to you.
jin.
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