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Twisted Illusions


Vomiting up words
that choke me in dreams
no-one to hear
my echo-less screams.

Claws rip the shroud
leave it tattered and torn
arrhythmia distorted
pulse starts to mourn.

Medicated illusions
reap chasms of my soul
coiling into cavity's
taking full control.

Visions are jumbled
in mental confusion
leaving thoughts wide
to twisted illusion.

Author notes

Prompt title Twisted Illusions

Just some medicated madness.

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  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    November 9, 2008

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    I know too well, about Medicated Madness!!! I like the flow of this and the rhyme scheme it has, poet...


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    November 9, 2008

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    nicely done
    best of luck

    Tasha


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    November 7, 2008

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    You gotta love medicated madness, lordy help us when you write without us because this is simply fantastic, great phrasing also. Best to you in the contest


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    November 6, 2008

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    Fantastic!!!

    Such wonderful wordplay/choice/use wrapped in a great narrative, rhythm & rhyme (as always)...
    I tend to vomit names... lol!
    Huuuuuuuuuuwww when the belly is full & Ruuuuuuuth when no more will come... lol!
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 5, 2008

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    Welcome back, welcome back, welcome back, you poems of darkness truly have been missed, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • aboomer silver member
    November 5, 2008

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    Love the prompt and what you did with it!
    This reads so smoothly! Great flow!
    Love your wording and images also.
    Well done!
    best wishes in the contest.


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    November 5, 2008

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    wow, this is amazing. I love your bg. and the poem itself blew me away! you always do!
    all my love
    kitty xxx


  • Lexie - gold member
    November 5, 2008
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    OH WOW!!

    This is incredible!!
    you really do blow me away with your creativity


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 5, 2008

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    I know the feeling hunny! This is so dark and sad.. the medicated madness creates powerful pennings... You need a medicated madness list like me!

    I hear them...


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    November 5, 2008

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    Oh wow honey
    Twisted Illusions have painted my mind with this awesome write.
    Pills pumped and liquid medication down the throat !
    Best wishes and good luck in the contest
    and, perfect rhyme
    Sis xx

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