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Fractured Fury

Missing image


Hidden, quietly boiling
my darkest frame of mind
emotions, visions that I hide
for no-one else to find.

Bubbles shimmer just below
a tainted coil tightly wound
thoughts, feelings just for show
hide fear of being found.

Festering deep inside
bitter thoughts betray
the overwhelming urge
to maim, impale and slay.

Searching desperately I seek
pathways through the maze of fate
needing to release resentment
unravel all this twisted hate.

 

Shadows now are calling me
leaking through a fractured shell
whispers chant to be unleashed
bring to all an untold hell.

 

One wrong move could crumble
my world come crashing down
there amongst the debris
bodies would lay - unbound.

 

 

 

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Credit: 5. http://eternalawareness.files.wordpress.com/2006/11/voices-she-s-hearing-voices-by-larafairie.jpg

Just venting, good to vent

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  • Paloszoo gold member
    November 12, 2008

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    The imagery in this write is fantastic! Well done! Thanks for entering my contest. I'm honored to have you share your work here. Good luck!


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    November 6, 2008

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    You've kept these newbies quiet...

    Outstanding!!!
    And loving them big time...
    Darkness bleeds for you in shadowed tones of deep visualisation & execution of the premise...
    Wonderful descriptions, great rhyme, rhythm & flow...
    Well penned, well versed, well done!!!


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 5, 2008

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    seriously we have got to do something together, i mean really, this is something golden, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • aboomer silver member
    November 5, 2008

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    Great job with the emotions and images in this. Goes great with that picture.
    Loved all your wording, but especially,

    'Searching desperately I seek
    pathways through the maze of fate
    needing to release resentment
    unravel all this twisted hate.'

    Well done!! best wishes in your contest.


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    November 5, 2008

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    ooh i love it twinny! This is very good. you penned it with perfection. and I adore it, sorry ive been slacking on you writes laltely lifes been tough you know?
    hope your ok
    love you!
    xxxx


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 5, 2008

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    Hide those bodies!!!

    Venting is good!!! Glad to see you writing hunny! Woot!

    This felt very real.. the emotions below the surface, the fears and terrors. Really spoke to me!

    Awesome writing!



  • Reptile Lady gold member
    November 5, 2008

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    I have been on one hell of a journey with this dark one hun !
    Dark morbid and brilliant
    Send a raw shiver ..
    Best wishes and good luck in my other sisters contest
    Julie

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