Eyes fluttering shut, she
reluctantly falls into an
eternal slumber
She dreamt of flowers coloured
in streaks of purple and blue,
giving her fresh kisses as she
passed by them
Suddenly, a glorious shower
poured down in her blurred reality,
& the flowers sung in tune with
her heartbeat, embracing
every single raindrop
But in her perfect world of
paper-cut hearts and throw-away laughter,
she longed to hear a voice.
A voice from reality. A voice to
tell her that this flawless fantasy
was all too perfect.
& as she slept, she struggled with herself;
she longed to grab onto something
real and pull herself out of this endless,
haunting dream
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt (Sleeping Beauty) by Sandygram.
900 points, ended November 19, 2008, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Reality vs. Illusions by Suicide Hotline.
700 points, ended December 28, 2008, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I like it but i feel like reallity and the illusions wasnt really standing in this, and it didnt really grasp my attention in the writing itself, but the thought was amazing, so was the flow. nice job.
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Well I think you captured how I felt about the picture quite well. A beautiful poem that stirs emotion while reading its lovely words. Thank you for entering my contest. This was a pleasure to read. It is most appreciated. You take care. Sandy
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oh my. that is the first thing that came to me when i read this. this is hauntingly beautiful my dear. you are so good! i love the story of sleeping beauty- but you mixed in so much emotion here instead of making it all mushy and lovey dovey. such a perfect tinge of reality and honesty here- this is perfectly crafted. oh my. oh my!!!
But in her perfect world of
paper-cut hearts and throw-away laughter,
oh wow. where do you get these lines
i was so caught up in your fantasy, in this piece...your words are elegant, perfect and what can i say about this?! awesome is such a shallow word
LOVED THIS WEE!!!!!!!
and when i say i loved this, i dont mean liked it i really really mean i loved it like woah!!!!!
you are so going to win something
love you much,
checkmate
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i thought i didn't do a nice enough job on this poem.
but you of all people liked it! and you're the pro. i am honoured (: haha
thanks for your heart warming comment.
i truly enjoy your poems but something i genuinely love are your comments.
thank you
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you thought you didn't do a nice job?! dude. this was awesome. i am going to check out ALL your stuff (: that is, if my sis doesnt come hollering after me for the com! lmao.
hehe i am no pro..i am worse than you and ranji and aparna..all your poems are smple, straightforward and beautiful. but thank you =)
LOVE YOU 
charu
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