Fevered sun that shine and glow
From body's fusion Lava did flow
Down the flesh with a touch it tend
Lava settled to form an island
Pleasures was released like flying sulfur
Fell burning kisses with desire on the fur
Cruel cinnamon; the flesh for thee screams
Wild thou art, an obsession hunts even in dreams
Cruel cinnamon; gift of youth a furious lad
Earthquakes and feathers, charm and drive mad
Sparkling eyes, reflects desire
The touch of the skin lit burning fire
Lusty notions, ran like blood in veins
Caressing kisses on breast fell like rain
The sweat then slid, like the child slide for fun
Heat increased, volcanoes breathed, furious love were undone
Heart started to quiver, from fever steaming the river
Creation of an erotical view, ferment bodies till brew
As I behold grapes on vines, from lips I drank wine
Then the flesh tasted tea, changed as sailing change the sea
Rush to douse in perfumed ponds,
The nectar of love starting to abounds
Calmly moved with views of seduction,
Aromatic bodies became an addiction
GODDESS of charm few who know
My lips with hers were bound with sew
Using passion to penetrate a dream
crossing the boarders of all extremes
Drumming beats, from the heart came neat,
My lips on hers with wine was knead
Nothing is taint, since she is bliss
She hooked my breath from the first kiss.
12:33pm
5-Nov-08
pardonne mes levres, elles trouvent du plaisir dans les endroits les plus inattendus...
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you rhyme. hmm I am curious why the time when written ?
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Hi G.b.d.
Very graphic and powerful images employed. This "first kiss" I am guessing is not literally a First Kiss ever, since you do not capitalise the title. So I am assuming it's the first kiss of a seasoned kisser with the nth partner or lover rather than a virginal experience? Have I understood this correctly? Your writing style is most provocative. -
beautiful, i am left speechless.
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Stunning.
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mmmmmmmmmmmm
very sensational write you could almost feel like you were there so good job
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I love your picture, and I love the poem, just not together. The picture is the epitome of innocence, and a first kiss here would be sweet and just barely stir deeper sensations. The poem however has real depth and passion, and is erotic on an adult level, first kiss or not. That being said, the poem is really strong, with lovely images, and very unusual word usage and word placement. Well- done.
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Watch the movie 'A GOOD YEAR' and you will understand the meaning of the photo..thank you for reading..
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I will try to do so. But should one have to have the background (which wasn't mentioned in your AN) to relate the picture to the poem? Just asking. I think your work is great!
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you are right its a bit personal...anyway i hope you like it...and thank you again for reading..
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Nice job...loved your choice of pic!
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a passionate piece
let me speechless and waiting for my kiss!
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Wonderful
Left me in awe...passion flows freely through this intricately delicate work of art. Very powerful descriptions depicting the feelings of intensity of a first kiss...well done!
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Wow. Very intense poem. So intense, in fact, that the picture is just a tiny bit off-putting, but generally a very good poem. The only real critique I have is be careful with how you string words together. You generally do a good job of making the words flow poetically, but occasionally you push it too far and it becomes awkward (like "Caressing kisses on breast fell like rain")
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beautiful.... i mean WOW thats rele beautiful
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Beautiful write. Eloquent and very romantic. It makes me want to fall in love. Cute picture choice by the way.
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shou hayda!!
this poem is absolutely,aromatic,sensual,breathtaking and makes one fall in love...
thank you for this amazing portrait...words cannot express enough..........
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lovely piece
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Oui ils le font
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Never Pardon your Lips!
from Your heart came this Masterful write! it speaks of kisses and imagery explodes !
beautifully written!
Rend
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I like the way you think and write
Thanks for sharing
Be Well
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Masterpiece of Emotions
Beautiful thoughts are locked in each verse of this poem, the metaphoric picture gave me the light of innocent love. You have a wonderful talent, and master the art of poetry in excellence. I totally enjoyed reading this as memories embraced my soul........novy
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