I met the man of my dreams,
just 4 years ago,
in the start everything was great,
till his dark side began to show.
He just gets so mad sometimes,
I am foolish enough to ask why,
I love this man oh so much, want him to get help,
he does not want to try.
He tells me that he loves me,
he does not mean to hurt me so bad,
all I wanted was his love again,
for him to look at me like he once had.
Told him tonight he was going to be a father,
I thought he would be as excited as me,
dreamed he would stop the abuse after hearing this,
sadly this was not to be.
The first punch came as a shock to me
as I tried to work out what I’d done,
if he did not want to start a family,
he should have worn a condom before we begun.
I try to run, he grabs my hair,
pulling me to the floor,
screaming how could this happen,
it’s not mine you are nothing but a whore!
I screamed I would not do that,
I love you why don't you love me?
I want us to be a happy couple,
have our child, be a family.
He kicks me one last time,
tells me to go clean my face,
this is the poem I leave to you all,
as I leave this place.
I looked into the mirror tonight,
and asked for a way out,
that is when I saw the answer,
the razor laying about.
Tonight I ended the abuse,
just could not take the pain,
I leave this poem as a message,
I hope for women who suffer from abuse,
my words will forever remain.
We deserve so much better,
we deserve to be loved back,
there is no so such thing as just once,
it will remain down the track.
So to all the women who suffer,
from abuse and know what I write about,
it is so hard to take this pain,
yet it seems so easy to just get out......
Author notes
I Seen this contest and it grabbed me I seen abuse I lived abuse and I must say no women deserves such a thing, a man who hits a lady is not a man he is a coward and for that man to say sorry I love you after is even more of a coward, no good man would lift his hand or even emotionally abuse the women he loves. This poem is wrote from the darker side of things some women think such an end is the only way but if anything this poem is saying get help walk away be strong deserve more in life then abuse.
A contest entry
- May I Prompt You? VII - Physical Abuse by Manda Kathryn.
500 points, ended November 22, 2008, 20 entries
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I wish you had credited the artist in this hunni, I so wanted to give this a trophy but the rules were there for a reason and I'm a meanie.
This was and is painfully acurate for many women in the world, me included [but thanks to you I got away
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I hope many people read this to see that it is better to be free then abused
♥
Stay safe
Love to You
~Manda
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this is an amazing write with great rhythm, the line the first punch came as a shock to me is epic, seriously good write
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this is a great poem, you did awesome in your protrayal of a woman in a abusive relationship, can feel the pain
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This is deep and so full of meaning, you did a wonderful job when writing this! Well done and best of luck in the contest
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With myself things were fine until I caught pregnant on the pill` then the abuse started in the manner you describe. I loved him dearly and he broke me in some ways for life apology after apology meant I'd take him back but promises were false. My decisions used to be made whilst very emotionally pulled, eventually I got to one Christmas and things were quiet but found myself asking if I wanted to go into another year of umknown with my children waiting for the next punch or kick to come...I contacted a womens refuge and solicitor and got out, frightened and away from all who knew us for safety. I never saw him again and I do not wish anything bad upon him, to me I see a sickness now that he would not take help for. Today my life is very different my children had to learn to overcome their own issues from what occurred but now we are well adjusted in our own relationships and next year I celebrate 10 years of marriage bwith a man who is totally different, whom I thought I could never learn to love or trust....guess I'm telling all to seek help, there is light at the end of the tunnel and life can be fun again for you. Stand up have a voice and be counted in saying NO to any form of abuse!
Thankyou for sharing a painful but accurately disturbing account in your plight to show reality. Some small adjustments couldenhance the write without taking away fromits purity and strength making it a more publishable piece for effective use for the cause. Well done poet! Kindest thoughts and wishes.
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I love it.
I have been in an abussive realtionship and how u describd it in the poem was exactly how I felt.
I think this is a brilliant write.
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this is a great poem, you have told the story very well, i did struggle with the flow (rhythem) a little though but that can be worked on, im no expert myself lol, but well done and good luck x
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So Heartfelt!!
A very powerful poem son. Your words are so vivid and true. Living with abuse for 13 years I know how hard it is to leave and how hard it is to realize they don't love you and their promises mean nothing. I should have left with the first black eye but I stayed like an idiot because I loved him. What a fool I was. I finally took my kids and left. Best thing I ever did. Years may pass but at times memories come back and you ask, why me?
I hope your words helps someone before they use a razor to end the abuse.
Thank you for sharing. Hugs and Smiles. You take care.
Bless You,
Love You, Mum
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words cant say how sad i am right now.. this poem brought tears to my eyes. this is a wonderful poem, but its so sad.. good use of words.. -
Sadly this is all to frequent.What is it that makes some think that pain and suffering inflicted on another can in any way be seen as love.
there is a strong emotional feel to this piece written as if the writer knows some of the pain inflicted Excellent
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