There is no sleep tonight:
no esta amor.
The wind can hold me tight:
There's no warmth anymore.
Porque yo hecho esto hecho,
esto cosa tremenda?
He dado un pezado
de mi corazon, mi vida.
Now, the light is dim tonight:
no esta amor.
las estrellas son una
red del pescador.
La muerte se lamente mi;
no puedo oir.
La tragedia de la vida
sounds in either ear.
Porque continuo,
cuando amor no esta?
El requesta es simple:
esperar continua.
A contest entry
- palomas negras [black doves] by unraveled.
550 points, ended November 23, 2008, 9 entries
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Comments
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Thank you for writing a poem in Spanish
Your grammar is, I think, pretty good on the whole. In the last paragraph, I am thinking for "requesta" you might mean "repuesta" if you mean answer.
I think it's pretty clever that you rhymed English and Spanish. On the whole, the topic was a little cliche, I didn't think it was super impressive, but I liked the blend of languages, and the words you chose to use.
-cassidy
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