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better like this.



i like to
leave watery ice cream
to melt on my tongue
on a cold day

with the fan
blowing in my face at
speed three

and a book
in my hands on my bed
with new sheets
at night


no you-
it’s less complicated
that way.


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  • Rembrandt Clarke
    November 10, 2008

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    i love poetry that simple captures a moment in all these words but its just a passage from the mind of the observer and it just likes to sing sing sing


  • Walk-Free
    November 5, 2008

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    i love this.

    it's simple, classy and really cynical.

    brilliant ending