Peeling the layers
tissue epidermis,
tainted, maimed,
reaps such sorrow,
in heartless words...
Author notes
Picking Scabs
40 words or less... 13 words
A contest entry
- Prompt Contest 15 entries 40 words or less #31 by mysticstorm.
650 points, ended November 6, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Almost putrid
The strength of the brevity and the choice of words give this piece a strong standing, leaves me purple, and bruised needing redemption from its sorrow.
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Heartless words will do that too you
Such a strong image in a few words!
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Such power in brevity...so very dark and sad...very moving in heartfelt emotions...excellent work...thank you for sharing.
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Thank you x
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Nice & creepy- then the message. Some tougues should waggle no more!
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Wow!!! Love this...
So dark, so deep, so short...
Beautifully penned & so intense in so few words & still managed to keep your visualisation within...
Seriously impressive work...
Well done!!!
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I can see why you would consider this violet. So very dark and sad.
I wish you all the best in this contest,
jin
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GREAT wording and images!
Well done!!
best wishes in your contest.
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You nailed this one Julie. I didn't have a clue what to write but your talent shines bright for your entry.
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Wow! Fantastic for such a short piece, quite dark for you hunni...I like it! Touch of sadness at the end, nice mix...good luck sis!
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this is just amazing Mum.. I really love this one.. Your words pain a picture quite vividly.
Fantastic job for 13 words.
good luck
kat
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Wow! Brilliant! Just brilliant. In such little words you've managed to captivate me with your words. An amazing take on the prompt. Best to you in the contest
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You know the drill
Let me know when it is done!
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