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You and I (Rough)

Stringing through these notes of mine
Smiling through the rain and sunshine
As my hand reaches over for yours
A little twinkle sparkles from your eyes

So entrancing they are
Sweet, loving, alluring
Pulling me ever so close
So chance a kiss between you and I

But how they elude me
As my eyes open up to the world
I see you so far away running in laughter
Beckoning me to come

And you know what?
I sit there just for these small seconds
Purely just now
Thinking of you

Your excited face all bright
Your cries of tears over the phone
Your goofy smirks of mischief
And best of all, your smiles all mine

Not making you wait any longer
I dash for the goal that I seek
You that's there for me
I'll catch up for sure
Just because...

I'm yours
Silly~

Author notes

Well this is rather rough and I came up with this fairly quickly. Or rather put some time into it. Hopefully I'll come back to it and fix it up more and I know I can do a lot better. Just think of this more of a rough draft *smirks*

Anywho~ Here you go hun! I hope you'll smile as you read this even though it's a bit... how should I say it? Dumb perhaps? xP Then again, most lovey dovey things come out dumb first But keep chipping at the stone, and perhaps it might turn into a nice piece of art! Maybe

And to all who took the time to read this, thanks ^^/

Thanks for checking it out! ^^/

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Comments


  • KaleidoscopicRage
    November 7, 2008

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    lol you are a hopeless romantic, Ibar. God knows you will never change tis cute though.

    xoxo
    Tia


  • Girl With Guitar silver member
    November 7, 2008

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    Naww, that just makes it so you. "Silly~" Cute.
    It's not dumb.... just, like young love Not quite art yet though haha.
    Very cute write, hope they like it


  • Auntie Crescencia
    November 5, 2008
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    *Claps for joy*

    It's sooo coool!!!!!!!!! i am smiling....its a bit dumb though


    • HidingInYourCloset
      November 5, 2008
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      I wouldn't be surprised ;P It's not refined in a way I'd want it to be, but if I ever do bother (quite possibly I won't) I'll fix it up xP