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A Fly Joined Me For Breakfast

A fly joined me for breakfast, and
whispered something rather peculiar in my ear.
He spoke of all, and with great detail
of the World ending with a whimper.

I found myself shocked.

Soft, soft, soft, squeals, of florescent lights
broken in a masquerade of exuberant colors
and the world left in shambles.

 

Too bad though, for those hollow whispers fade,

and the squeals, are only but squeals:  inaudible, helpless.

 

Buzz, pestering buzz, that squeals, o it bothers me so.

So the end of my newspaper it go.

And splattered over propaganda-spread articles,

lays the truth, bludgered;

 

 

a whimper.

 

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  • badnovocaine
    November 5, 2008

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    WHOA! Nice, when I put that title down I would have never thought of what you just wrote about. Thats awesome. I loved the bright humor in this! Especially the ending. You did a great job on the prompt and using this title. I also thought that nobody would do this title and you proved me wrong, shows what I know
    Nice job here.