You go and leave this all behind,
You take my hand but refuse to find
That every time you look at me
Its only angst and worthlessness you can see.
The pain you give me is all I have
Holding onto you with what is left of me
To see
To be
Feel the misery in me.
Your laugh is tearing me apart.
Why is it that you do not love me?
Did I do something wrong?
Tell me so I can see
That there is nothing left in me.
I am color blind to your painting, your image of me,
I can’t see how this is suppose to be
Please let me be a memory
Leave me here to die
Finally out of reach,
Finally out of grasp,
Finally out of your cage of glass.
Eh?
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haha this is a fuckingamazin=]but sad =[
damn i wish i could write as good as yew i suck at it
i love this line "I am color blind to your painting, your image of me,I can’t see how this is suppose to be"actually i luv this whole peom ur an awesome writter =]
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omg you really think i am???? i think i suck soo bad lol but thanks!!!
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That great
this is a great write....really enjoyed reading it...you dont have to work on rhyming you can free write...and it would still be as good...nice work
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thanks Mucho!!!!
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This is cool, very lyrical; i kept imagining this as a song.
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haha thanks.
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Nice work....it seems you have a knack for poetry. Just work on your rhyming structure and flow a little and you got it down pat
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w/e ever I suck like a bad blow job lol
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very good
loved it and again YOU LIE!!
You can write poetry and this way better then anything i can come up with -
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whatever I suck so bad lol
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no you don't and if u keep saying that i'm going to hurt u *picks up steal bat*
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agiain, w-o-w! simply put, I LOVE IT! the confusion-mixed-love sucks much, doesn't it?
kAsSiE
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omg it sucks so bad
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yea, it should be counted as a chronic condition of the heart. there should be meds just for that. but sadly, there's none, and you only get told to suck it up.
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I know it sucks so bad
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Well, I have known of the person you hav epenned here. Gone out of my life before she could drag me down. It is sad and works. I have a problem with contractions in poems. Try: Why is it that you do ot love me.
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Okay thanks.
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Am speechless! Wow, it's amazing. And my favorite part is:
I am color blind to your painting of what I am suppose to be
Way to go
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Thanks, glad you liked it !!!
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You're welcome anytime!!
Nela
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awwwwwwwwwwww...trying to breath, dear god!!!
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Umm... okaayyy.lol. Thanks lol
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Wow.
This is realy powerfull.
I enjoyed reading this.
great Write!
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Thanks, glad you liked it.
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i like it... it's wicked....very powerful
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Thanks, I'm glad you liked it, thanks for the aplauses lol
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i like this a lot...it's very powerful with a lot of good imagery. really nice job on this one.
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Thanks alot, so glad you liked it, I was half thinking about taking it off, but maybe not.
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i love it
its so easy to relate to
good job =]
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thanks alot, glad you liked it.
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I vote. MAKE IT A SONG! This would be an amazing song. I myself write and play acoustic. and if this was a song, id love to do a cover on it.
Amazing work here dear.
Just...AMAZING!!
<3 Oz
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Haha, maybe I should, but I can't write songs lol You could try I guess.
Thanks,
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This is a very sad piece. I love the line "I am color blind to your painting of what I am supposed to be" I think so many are color blind to everyone elses perception of them. Its a horrible thing, trying to live up to others expectation, and you penned that nicely in this piece. Great work!
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Thanks very much, I'm glad you liked it. And yes it is, though I'm happy I cought at least some of the emotion of it.
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wonderful. Ilove it.
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Aw, thanks, hun. I don't like it though, I hate all my writes lol
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