She rides a painted tortoise
emblazened with elderwyrds
bathed in silver light
bewitching the tide
and toying with lunar pull
in playfull tug of war
tweenst wills.
A contest entry
- My Welcome Back by Amorous Arms.
750 points, ended December 15, 2008, 59 entries
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Comments
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love this....in my style i would have written:
my love,
come ride with me
upon a painted tortoise
emblazed with elderwyrds.
Bathing us together
in the soothing lunar pull.
A playful tug of war
between your will and mine.
my love,
come ride with me
upon a painted tortoise.
you have brillant simile's and metaphors,
i'm having a hell of a time choosing your best
poem!
ears/Seattle
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Oh, I really like this one! Truly, you can always entrance me with mermaid mysticism, but this one has a particular charm...and of course I am always a sucker for your way with the words
Blue~
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