~ Dip me in the stream lift-
me-with gentle hands of love
sing-me-lullabies-tender-
from-days gone bye.
Open will my
heart lay within-
still waters-soul in
hand-with grace her-
glory divine. Saturate-
me within her goodness
secure my joy declare,
my hope; fulfilled. ~
Author notes
~ This poem contains 50 words total ... and 20 lines. The words make out a picture of a vessel ready to be filled. ~
~ The picture is creddited to: __oich__e_mahrnaay___by_night_fate ~
~ The reason that there are Hyphens "so many of them") is because I have a computer that speaks them with a faster and slower and higher and lower pitch of voice, giving a certain kind of ebb-and-flow to the work with a softer more fervent and realistic and consistent tone, when I use the hyphens and other punctuation in the certain places that I do, when in telling it what to do. Allowing it to speak in even a moderate voice if I choose. It sounds very free flowing when I hear it, and I can only hope that you will be able to here it in the same way. Thank you for reading and God bless you ... ~
James ~
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt. by Angelflower.
900 points, ended November 7, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
How did it make you feel? What could I have done differently?
Comments
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You are such a great writer!!!
The Ebb and Flow is great. Wish I had a computer that read it back to me. It seems to me like Gold but I have not read the others. These lines I love the best.
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~ Dip me in the stream lift-
me-with gentle hands of love
sing-me-lullabies-tender-
from-days gone bye"
That is from the heart. Your friend, Jackie
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Awww this makes me feel so enlightened and humble, in many ways. Something beautiful, not tragic for a change.
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Hot
Your Great at conveying the `Better get better infinity +29` bliss-possible that comes out of life's mysteries
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I enjoyed reading this very much my friend. Your talent has really grown since we first became aquanted. Love, Cathy.
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well first off the picture is missing so I didn't get to see this... but the poem itself is wonderful. Full of imagery and emotion. I must say that I like it. I like the way you use only certain words and you get your idea across very well. thanks for sharing this.
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Great word usage and I like the use of form poetry on this one and how it looks like a vase.
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This is good, I like it a lot! Usually lots of punctuation and symbols detracts but the way you incorporated it into the poem makes the read more interesting.
Good job, thanks for adding your poem to the group!!
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such a sweet poem
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Lovely!!!!!!!!!!!!!
James this was so precious...such feelings of serenity and love just permeate throughout the entire piece here...I know it touched the intended recipient because it sure touched my heart...words flowing ever so gently!!! Just keep up the great work!!! Thanks for sharing!!!~~~Toni~~~
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Great piece of shape poetry charged with emotion and feeling. excellent presentation.
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Oh! this was really really beautiful! I don't really know what to say! it was short but it was packed with so much emotion! I truly loved this write! thank you very much for sharing. Best of luck in the contest.
Angel
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This is great you fill every line with meaning. Every line demonstrated a true knowledge of love and joy. It reminds me that we need to appreciate the ones we love even the smallest every day things we do for each other that leave a lasting imprint on our hearts. Wonderful my friend.
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Inspiring,
I really likethe last two lines. Great job, and good luck in the contest.
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This is mystical and beautiful
I loved it all...Peaceful, easy loving feelings. Gifted throughout the grace and peace of His love. "Poem Written for(you) is the blessed one"
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