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Total eclipse of the heart

Here I am falling apart
slowly losing my heart
lifeless,lost,and broken
I became nothing but a token

Of a foolish game
driving me insane
to the depths of despair
and baby it's just not fair

The way you treat me
is nothing more than a memory
and now what has become
of a lost little girl, come undone

Like a shot to my soul
left me feeling not whole

now i'm lost in the dark

and you're a total eclipse of my heart

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  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    November 9, 2008

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    This poem has such a nice rhythm to it, and the way you rhymed the lines, made it a vcery excellent poem to read, poet...